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for The Power Lies Within

by Hedwig8347

person Carmella
schedule May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sweet! Dude I would have never thought of that, man do I so want to read more please?
person Golden
schedule May 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
thisis really good! Please write more and soon :9
person fraser
schedule May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
aweome story but one minor error, the timeturner was used in her third year, not fourth
person Ginny
schedule May 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think that your story has potential. I have notebook full of plot bunnies and what you have laid out here is similar to one of them. The whole LV prophecy incorporated with a MLC (my favorite stories, when well written). A beta would be a huge asset. One that not only checks the grammer, etc, but also a canon beta...I\'m a huge stickler for canon and become quickly annoyed when canon is overlooked. Case in point: During their 7th year, Hermione is 18 as of September 19th...no need for time-turner and other such nonsense (especially since Fudge implied that time-turners didn\'t exist). This time-turner to make her legal age drives me batty and JKR made it unnecessary, but it\'s still in use even after she told us. :-? Keep writing, as I said, your story has potential... Cheers! ~Gin
person angel
schedule May 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh my god ....well that was a way to put it .... please update soon i need to know what happens next

angel
person Kayree
schedule May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Update!!!! & quickly! I LOVE hermione & severus pairings & I REALLY love marriage law fics. Yours is really different. Its great!!! Keep it coming!
Love & Luck,
Kayree
person catpower
schedule May 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A bit of a short chapter - but at least now we know exactly where things are going. Sev is looking very frightening in Dumbledore\'s office. Personally, I would like him to seem extra ferocious as Hermione hears that she has to marry him and stay ferocious and forbidding until they are actually married! I\'d like H to be REALLY scared of him - and then get a nice surprise when he turns out to be alright really.
schedule May 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter! Update soon!

Tiffany
person Innogen
schedule May 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Everything is moving quickly, and I find this appealing. And then, it stopped. Bummer. Hope you can write fast :P
Inn~
person BertMC
schedule May 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ywaaahhhhhh, New Chappie! Short but needed. More please!