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for The Game of Destiny

by sybersnake

person ancientgirl
schedule April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well not much to go on, but enough to have me curious. I\'ll await more from you.
person Mada
schedule April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I don\'t know how long you have known English, but I have to say that your way of describing things shows great linguistic creativity! With a beta and some revision, you will be well on your way to a good fic. Good luck, you are an inspiring author, writing in a non-native language!
person Yabo
schedule April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting. Vampire Severus is very hot. I\'m waiting for more.
person LariLee
schedule April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think it\'s time to find another beta. Besides the typos, your verb tenses shift within the story. This makes it very difficult to read.
person yeahyeah
schedule April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey u seem good so far but where\'s the rest yaaint gonna leave a fella waitin r ya? lol hoping for another chapter soon
person Sabrina
schedule April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story is good so far. Please update soon.
person Stormi
schedule April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice beginning.