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for A Pale Shadow

by fearonpenneth

person miststalker
schedule May 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It\'s a good story I think that you have something good here. The one thing that I am noticing continuily is the fact that you use the wrong words sometimes.

ie chapter four:
person antipyro
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, Wow! I just found this and it\'s really a great story.

Poor Severus in Azkaban, Harry must get him out NOW!

Fudge never was a favourite of mine. Just a stuffed shirt, huffing and puffing! I know he\'ll get his.....*snickers deviously*

Oh, and Harry has his own army of friends, ex-enemies and the Order. I love the idea, just not too clear on how it happened. Oh, well, it really doesn\'t matter anyways.

So, if Harry was in coma for almost a year, Severus would have been in Azkaban for almost that length of time too. OUCH! Poor Severus, I hope he\'ll be o.k. Please, Please????

Please write more and soon. This is a great story and you\'ve written it well. I\'ve noticed some grammatical errors, but I can still make out the inference. Not a flame, just a comment.

Just keeping writing this!
person Kaitlin
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was amazing. Are Fudge and the ministry now a dark regime or just uneducated bastards? I\'m a little confused how that was allowed to occur, but I guess war creates chaos. Well please update soon I would like to see how Severus is doing, i hope he\'s not too broken.
person cdkobasiuk
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a very interesting read. I am enjoying your characterizations . I\'m fying to see how Snape is when Harry finaly gets him back.

cdk
person TEC
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting story. I\'m looking forward to finding out what happens next. Thanks.
person Hambares
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooh, can\'t wait for more updates!
person manx
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think that this is going to be one of my favorite stories. I am looking forward to more!
person Hel Bee
schedule April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi

I like the premise of the story and the feel of almost Nazi!Fudge with SS type disappearances. You have a good style which is easy to read. I look forward to next installment.
person pinktarg
schedule April 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This post-war reality is one I think is quite feasible. With Harry out of action and Dumbledore dead, it would be a perfect time for Fudge to imprison those wizards he felt were a threat to his reign and to seize the lands, money, and power of any wizard he could. I\'m very intrigued by your first 3 chapters and like the unhurried pace at which you are revealing the horror that occurred while Harry was in the coma. I hope that you decide to continue the story and look forward to your next update.
schedule April 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I truly love the way that you have written these first three chapters. I love how you slowly unravel what has happened inbetween when harry went into the coma, and what happend while he was in it. Though i am eagerly awaiting when he finally meets up with Severus, lol. Best of luck in continuing this and keep up the amazing work.

- Jessica