rate_review Reviews

You have a great story here without a doubt. You truly do need a good beta for it brings down the integrity of the story. If you hale from a different country and English is a second language, then I still recommend that you seek a beta. For all the journey it takes to learn the English language, nothing can replace seeing it written over and over the right way. I have seen dyslexia in some writing and it is interesting in itself for the person often writes the words correctly but with the words mixed up but I do not see that here. Don\'t settle for less. You are writing in the English language therefore I would assume that you wish to use this ability in your everyday life. It would be a lie to say that you will not have to work hard to achieve this no matter why you struggle with this. Keep trying for excellance and if you don\'t ever achieve it you may be still quite happy with what is accomplished. And please don\'t let others tell you its not important, because it is. You see this clearly when you have to write something important and it makes you seem as though you aren\'t a smart as I can clearly see in your writing that you are. Good luck my friend and we will keep our eyes out for your further work.

*smacks all who hurt harry* bad people! no treat!

Oh I can\'t wait for chapter 4!

hey im so glad you updated i really like this story alot i hope you do so again soon

wow this is a great plot i hope you finnish it...i tend to start stories that authors dont seem to want to finish...i really hope your not one of them for both your stories. You write to well to do that!!!!!!!!!!!

more soon please luving this so far xxx

omg omg omg I love the story line....I can\'t wait for more....the only thing that I can say is that you have a lot of misspelled words....otherwise its an awesome story! Can\'t wait for more!!!!

OH OH OH OH this is good.... OHHHHH>.. update soon......

It progresses very well, but you really need to proof read! (example: \"if he can take care of himself\"... should be \"if he can\'t take care...\")

Poor pitiful Harry. Yea!!!!! Happy dance, happy dance. What attack? If he\'s a declared death eater, where is his mark? And why is he still at school? If he\'s valuable as a weapon, why are they letting him fall apart? Will Draco save the day? Where is Dumbledore? Where is Herm.? You have a unique (to me) angle and I hope you will continue when you return from vacation. In the meantime, public libraries will let you plug in!!!!!

Does the title refer to the loss of Harry\'s soul through pain, or the idea that the fey have no soul?