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May 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
aww the last chapter is lots and lots of fluff but i like it ^-^
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May 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
So.. I hope you won\'t hit me or anything... but I have something to critize.
I really liked the first part of the story. It would have been a great one if,... and here starts the not so nice part. In the end of chapter five, you lost it. You really did. Making Lucius the nice guy... I just did not buy it. All in all, I did not buy your happy end. It was just terribly out of character and too constructed. I got the impression that you wanted a happy end at all costs - for example plausibility.
What you could do better: 1.) Spend more time on the characters, their motivation and their actions. 2.) Try to work on the plot a bit more. You rushed too much in the end, like you wanted to finish as fast as possible. I would have prefered it, if you had written a bit more to illustrate the feelings etc.
Doro
I really liked the first part of the story. It would have been a great one if,... and here starts the not so nice part. In the end of chapter five, you lost it. You really did. Making Lucius the nice guy... I just did not buy it. All in all, I did not buy your happy end. It was just terribly out of character and too constructed. I got the impression that you wanted a happy end at all costs - for example plausibility.
What you could do better: 1.) Spend more time on the characters, their motivation and their actions. 2.) Try to work on the plot a bit more. You rushed too much in the end, like you wanted to finish as fast as possible. I would have prefered it, if you had written a bit more to illustrate the feelings etc.
Doro
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May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Too sweet... Thanks for the wrap-up!!! Looking forward to even more of your writings!!!!
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May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love fluff. Nice ending
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May 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOOHOO!!!!!You finished it!!! Wonderful! It\'s going into my keeper pile!!!
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May 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awwwwww... they are soo cute.... thank you so much for sharing.. *love*
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May 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i love this story! ombj that was positivly the best chapter ever! can\'t wait to read more!
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May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
aww this is so adorable i can\'t wait for the next chapter ^-^
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May 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Just what I needed on this ole dreary day a nice story with a happy ending and I\'m smiling. Thanks
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May 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hm, so what will the next part be about? Well at least Draco \'fessed up!