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November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow. What a completely fantastic story. Gripping and the hottest sex scenes I have ever come across.
I was so pleased to come across a story of this caliber and for it to be complete. I really really loved this story and I will definitely be reading any sequel. I've never been keen on Draco/Harry before, but having them along with Hermione was perfect. I thought you were very mean to poor Severus though; I always believed in him, even after HBP. I was quite surprised that Harry didn't just kill him with his blood that he took earlier, although the way you did it was more dramatic. It would have been a bit disappointing to have the triad kill Voldemort easily within the first five minutes of the final battle. Your way was great.
One thing has worried me a bit. If every generation of Marlston's forms a triad with a dark lord and there can only ever be one dark lord, the future doesn't bode well for Harry. Surely the next dark lord needs to be born at around the same as Hermione gives birth.
The one thing that for me could have added even more authenticity to the story would be to avoid so many "Americanisms", in a story that is set in Britain. It's not a big thing, but being English, words like candy seem out of context. Pretty much all fanfics have Americanisms though, so it really isn't a big thing.
I am an avid reader of Harry Potter world fanfics (I read this one in just over a day), but I have never left more than a short line review. I had to leave more comments for you, just because I have enjoyed this story so much.
I was so pleased to come across a story of this caliber and for it to be complete. I really really loved this story and I will definitely be reading any sequel. I've never been keen on Draco/Harry before, but having them along with Hermione was perfect. I thought you were very mean to poor Severus though; I always believed in him, even after HBP. I was quite surprised that Harry didn't just kill him with his blood that he took earlier, although the way you did it was more dramatic. It would have been a bit disappointing to have the triad kill Voldemort easily within the first five minutes of the final battle. Your way was great.
One thing has worried me a bit. If every generation of Marlston's forms a triad with a dark lord and there can only ever be one dark lord, the future doesn't bode well for Harry. Surely the next dark lord needs to be born at around the same as Hermione gives birth.
The one thing that for me could have added even more authenticity to the story would be to avoid so many "Americanisms", in a story that is set in Britain. It's not a big thing, but being English, words like candy seem out of context. Pretty much all fanfics have Americanisms though, so it really isn't a big thing.
I am an avid reader of Harry Potter world fanfics (I read this one in just over a day), but I have never left more than a short line review. I had to leave more comments for you, just because I have enjoyed this story so much.
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November 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
AMAZING STORY!! This is the first chapter story that I have gotten really into since reading DH. I loved how you came up with the wonderful plot and evolved from a pure smut story to this epic. It took me a couple weeks to read it all, but these last few chapters I found I couldn't stop myself from finishing! Now it's 2 A.M. and I'm glad I read it all. You are a great writer!!!
Peace,
Yellow Moon a.k.a. Malina Rana a.k.a. Watch Out for Yellow Moon on ff.net.
Peace,
Yellow Moon a.k.a. Malina Rana a.k.a. Watch Out for Yellow Moon on ff.net.
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November 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi I love this story and I am actually starting a website for all of my favorite fanfictions and I was wondering if I could put this story on there. You can email me at mm_for_ever2005@yahoo.com. Cant wait to hear from you and thank you either way.
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November 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I just had to say it, I love this story. I am reading it for like my 3rd time. Its just awesome, I love the plot. Its one of my favorites. I just felt like expressing that to you tonight. Keep on with your writing you are a great author.
Thanks
Thanks
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November 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ok, I officially love this. Not only is the story incredibly hot, the plot is brilliant too :)
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October 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Holy! so far 5 chappis i i've to tell you this is totaly hot. god, you write really good smut. so i am totally going to read all 62 chapters. Thanks for writing
PS: i've never read anything that was hot like that
PS: i've never read anything that was hot like that
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October 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi again 5 more chapters less to read and this story is still extremly hot, but also very funny. thank you for that really.
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September 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love the story so far - sexy, dark, thrilling, kinky, etc. - and I've only one complaint for Chapter 33: tattoo getting hurts, _especially_ on your inner thighs. I know Hermione was very aroused and excited and the whole experience was intense and distracting, but I sincerely doubt that there was no pain whatsoever for her - _unless_ they used a spell or something to make sure it wouldn't hurt at all. If that's the case, I feel it should have been mentioned; if not, I feel that some explanation as to why she feels no pain whatsoever in such a sensitive area while being tattooed should be given.
Besides that...this chapter is incredibly hot and sexy. The dark sexual rituals, the stranger, the cloaks, the masks...it's all very sexy. They're seem to be very distracted from what they're supposed to be doing there, but, hey, I don't blame them. ;)
Besides that...this chapter is incredibly hot and sexy. The dark sexual rituals, the stranger, the cloaks, the masks...it's all very sexy. They're seem to be very distracted from what they're supposed to be doing there, but, hey, I don't blame them. ;)
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September 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wonderfully written!
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September 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh god that's a lot of chapters.
Sadly, I do not have the time to read them all right now, but I will soon.
I just hope Harry and Draco stay away from each other cause that's really not my cup of tea.
Oh.. Tell your mate to write more on his fic too. it was good. and directed me to this one xD
Sadly, I do not have the time to read them all right now, but I will soon.
I just hope Harry and Draco stay away from each other cause that's really not my cup of tea.
Oh.. Tell your mate to write more on his fic too. it was good. and directed me to this one xD