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I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

wow, great story! i do hope that you will continue the story and that would make me very happy! plus more and in greater detail with severus and hermione would no go amiss either!

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

I really like this beginning. Please continue!

Interesting First Chapter. Short but interesting. Continue orevie will be in a pink dress sprouting Barney songs..........*Shuders*

Please continue
BrianDarksoul(Twisted and Dark)

Details, details! That was short, good for a first starting off, but try adding more detail. Make ur reader experience it. It was a bit to fast when you brought Snape into the picture. It could be a mystery for Hermione (and wouldn\'t he just rather put an eye-tricking spell to make it look like he raped her? It\'s too soon for her to give it to him. She\'s his student for Christ\'s sake!). You kept him sinister though!

The ever smooth Professor Snape, a very good start to your very first fic. PLease continue.

All i can say is wow,

update fast

This could be interesting. It feels a bit rushed right now. I\'d say just take your time and explore detail. Put yourself in her place and explain the searing pain that ran through her....her thoughts....What was it in Snapes voice that made her calm. The more vivid details you can put into your story, the more you will draw in your audience. You have to make them see a movie in thier minds just by your writing. They need to feel if it\'s cold, hot, moist, muggy, soft, slow, passionate, the wetness of his lips on hers...how her body and why it reacted differently to him. If you must, put yourself in each of the characters places and explore your own thoughts and feelings.
Good luck to you...I\'ll keep an eye out for updates.
Cherie

Awsome so far! Please update and soon! I can\'t wait to see what happens next!

Tiffany