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May 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awww!
Oh shit....what is Dumbledore gonna say about Severus and Hermione?!
Oh god...you have to update asap.....please!
Oh shit....what is Dumbledore gonna say about Severus and Hermione?!
Oh god...you have to update asap.....please!
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May 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, you get your chapters done fast! I have always been painstakingly slow, because I love to edit. I enjoyed this chapter and wish it had been longer! It is great that you keep the readers hungering for more!
Much better with the dialogue, by the way. You have the capitalization just right! Make sure you use a comma instead of a period in instances like this, though:
Yours: \"Not as of yet.\" the worried Professor replied.
Corrected: \"Not as of yet,\" the worried Professor replied.
However, if the dialogue ends in an exclamation point or a question mark, do not change those to a comma. Only use a period instead of a comma if you do not have a \"he said\" type of phrase after the dialogue - only if an entirely new sentence starts instead.
Much better with the dialogue, by the way. You have the capitalization just right! Make sure you use a comma instead of a period in instances like this, though:
Yours: \"Not as of yet.\" the worried Professor replied.
Corrected: \"Not as of yet,\" the worried Professor replied.
However, if the dialogue ends in an exclamation point or a question mark, do not change those to a comma. Only use a period instead of a comma if you do not have a \"he said\" type of phrase after the dialogue - only if an entirely new sentence starts instead.
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May 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Lemons??? hehe Lemons?
Are you going to end the story with them getting together? or are you going to continue it and show their life together?
should I just stop being a nosy witch and see what happens next?? lol
TaintedAngel xxx
Are you going to end the story with them getting together? or are you going to continue it and show their life together?
should I just stop being a nosy witch and see what happens next?? lol
TaintedAngel xxx
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May 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I cannot wait for some action!!!! Great story. I like the characters you created and I feel that you can make Severus act any damn way you want since it is your story! It\'s kind of refreshing having Snape be soft
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May 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Sat down and read it in an evening... I love it! Can\'t wait to see what happens next, I imagine Voldy\'s gonna be furious over Lucius\'s loss. Update soon!
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May 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yes yes yes that was really really fast..... i not wait to find out what happen next i sooooooooooooo love your story and when you do get done with it i will read it all over again :) and when you get a nother story started i will read it to .... you wright every every well i hope you ..... update soon well lov\' ya and later .
angel
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May 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter! Glad they got there in time . . . though of course it is hard to write a story if you murder your main character(s)!
Sort of non-sequitor but when I see the full name of Seraphim, I think of that shy redhead postulent nun in Sister Act after Whoopi\'s character taught her to sing -- the beautiful, perfectly pitched line, \"Sweet Seraphim . . .\" Makes me smile.
Sort of non-sequitor but when I see the full name of Seraphim, I think of that shy redhead postulent nun in Sister Act after Whoopi\'s character taught her to sing -- the beautiful, perfectly pitched line, \"Sweet Seraphim . . .\" Makes me smile.
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May 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ohhhhh i just love this story and i cant wait soo i hope to read the next every every soon well later...
angel
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May 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i just read your fic start till now. tainted angel refered me to it saying that it was worth reading. i have enoyed it so far. the only critisism i have is that the chapters are very short and not much happens per chapter. the story is not very involved or strong but sometimes it is good not to have to many plot lines in on story.
i will be looking foward to reading more and your reveiwers seem to love this story!
SLIW
Yes tainted angel. you do like smut. only need to read your stories to see that girlfriend.
i will be looking foward to reading more and your reveiwers seem to love this story!
SLIW
Yes tainted angel. you do like smut. only need to read your stories to see that girlfriend.
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May 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh man, that was so evil, you have now reached the level of sadistic, i can\'t wait for the next chappie