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Ch. 4 I can't believe Snape could summon Dumbledore by calling him like he was a house-elf. That doesn't seem right. Also Snape's using words like "kid" and that doesn't seem right either. Dumbledore's revelation that Harry loves Snape is all wrong to me. It's something Harry should have confessed himself, rather than having the beans spilled by someone else.

However, the story is mildly interesting and not too badly written. I am drawn in enough to continue reading. I want to see how the rest of his story goes.

Ch. 5 I like the idea of Harry having a happy sexual experience with someone else. An innocent virginal Harry is lovely but one who's enjoyed the attentions of another has its charms as well. Here is a Harry who knows what he's about in bed and can bring pleasure to another partner. He might even surprise Snape, too. He already has, hasn't he?

Ch. 6 The misspellings and errors in grammar made reading this a trifle irksome. But the rest of the chapter was well executed. Harry's anxiety and terror in talking about the rape to his friends, their cameraderie and Snape's carping were all convincingly portrayed. He kept on withering on a bit too much about Gryffindors too much. But otherwise this was a fair chapter.

Ch. 9 Suck lemons? Is that a fellatio joke I don't get? However, I am a tad impatient at this point. We've had an excellent m/f writing of Hermione giving Ron head but all we get in the m/m sector is kissing. Tsk tsk.

Ch. 10 I wish I knew what happened to Vernon Dursley. Also, the dream sequence was lovely but it was frustrating to have it end where it did. Snape must have found it so as well. You're such a tease.

Ch. 11 Thanks for explaining about the lack of sex between Harry and Severus. The ending was good and that nightmare truly frightening. Good work.

I really enjoyed this story. It was a really good mix of fun, angst, love and hate. I always love seeing Snape become Severus and Malfoy become Draco. There are so many ways to write it that I never get tired of it. I really like how you included Seamus with the trio from the beginning. The open flirting and teasing between he and Harry (and Ron and Hermione) was very realistic and well done. I will admit that they stray a little OOC but they deserve to have fun once in a while too dammit!

I know that it's been a while since you posted this story but is there any chance that you might still write the sequel? Maybe? Please?!? Thanks for sharing.
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brilliant want more a second one or an epilogue or something!!!! my email: Ladybug452000@Gmail.com

fantastic. is there a sequel?

That was excellent, I loved it so much *squel* I hope you continue.