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for I\'m watching you!

by Cupiditatis

person eppes
schedule April 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Looks to be an intruiging read. I definitely like your story. One question? Marcus isn\'t troll looking like he was described in the books is he?
person lensa
schedule April 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
sorry I didn\'t review your other chapters. I like all of your characters so far, especially oliver! wish I had friends that could cook. lol. NE way My one critique is that I don\'t think you should make Marcus all vunerable about being a death eaters son, he always struck me as a real son of a bitch and the best good guys are bad guys. Ya know. Not that he should be a complete bastard but don\'t let him go soft. OHHH well do whatever the hell you want \'cause I love your story so far. WRITE.
Lensa
person lensa
schedule April 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
love the chapter, and as always oliver! I wasn\'t suggesting that marcus not have a past it is just that some authors have a tendency to let their tough guys go soft. Ugghh. Love it keep writing.
lensa
person \"you killed kenny, you bastard!\"
schedule April 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*Chuckles eviliy* Hmm, loved Marcus reaction.
person tdk
schedule April 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice. You have a faithful reviewer in me.
person Evilevergreen
schedule April 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi!

Please don\'t think I\'m stalking you, =) but I was just wondering, since you have this posted on different sites will there be differences in the story, since you also have them under different ratings?

person mimi
schedule April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What? Dreading seeing Angelina?! Sounds like love in the making to me. I kid! Also the chapter may have been short, but it\'s still good.
person Yawn
schedule April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
:Cheers: Yea, Marcus is introduced! I already can sense thw sparts that will fly. Good update.
person Teda
schedule April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is an absolutely fab story. It has a very nice flow and the characterisation so far is very, very good. Besides, romances that are above the norm are my favorites. Please, update as soon as humanly possible! I can\'t wait for the next chapter!
person mimi
schedule April 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Missing items and weirdo flowers? My kind of story. I really go for drama/suspensful filled romances. Can\'t wait for the would-be-love interest to show up in the story!