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person luvhp
schedule June 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
MMmm, what a nice friend, but what about tomorrow??? :)
person somechick73
schedule July 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This needs more chapters, but it\'s written well. Please, continue, and if you have the time, let me know when you update via email, so that I can read it. ;)
person Rabid Squirrel Hunter
schedule April 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Quite awesome. Loved it.
person vgss
schedule March 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good scene, well-paced. I noticed you happen to use the same term repeatedly very close together (as I usally do before correcting it).

Ex: flicking her tonuge, thrust, own hand/own tongue.

Just a little advice that another read-though might help a bit.