rate_review Reviews

I'd really love a continuation to this story.

The dietary habits of the Dodo bird, and how their unusual three-way mating habits where they are surrounded by family, friends, and co-workers from the local police precinct who witness the passing of the unborn child from mother to father by the local virginal janitor have influenced the economic rise and fall of not only 2.478974th World Countries, but inadvertantly led to the creation of Boohbah, Teletubbies, and low-fat chocolate cheesecake made with tofu. And possibly gave us Milli Vanilli, but lab experiments have yet to be conclusive on that matter.

And now, as a result of the Dodo bird taking this act to Vegas, the Men In Black are having to negotiate with the Outer Space Three-Headed, One-Eyed, One-Horned, Flying Purple People Eaters In Yellow Polka-Dot Bikinis Who Are On Limited Social Security to see if they can\'t talk them out of blowing up Earth to clear the way for a new extention of The Interstellar Highway 101. And to get them to stop trying to audition for American Idol, have them audtion for The Apprentice instead.

Then I\'d say that if I had the time, I\'d share with them the REALLY shocking secret of what albino elephants doing the lambada in puce-colored spandex with frilly neon pink tutus has to do with global warming, but that I\'m late for my volcanic mud bath and facial peel, so could they meet me in about 2789 years, I\'ve got an opening then in my schedule, I could possibly pencil them in for a 1 second appointment, but only if they called for it back in 1321. Otherwise, I\'m booked solid until 5348.

Thank you for the cold water. it helps to have someone point out what i need to do. as for the one who reviewed after, i have read all the books and i have corrected \"Hermione\". so bugger off. i don\'t apreciate attitude. don\'t dish it unless you can recieve it.

HERMIONE is her name--not HEROMIONE READ THE BOOKS

You have an interesting start to your story, however, there are a huge number of errors in canon, spelling, grammar, and punctuation. You really should consider getting a beta who would be able to read over your work and correct these mistakes before you upload. Also, your chapters are getting shorter and shorter. Chapter 4 was a paragraph. If you added chapters two, three and four together, you would get a nice chapter length. I\'m sorry to be the drop of cold water on your fiction.

Thanks for correcting me about Hermione. i promise to spell it right in the future chapters... honestly.

you spelled hermione wrong. honestly.

this looks like a good story! please continue soon!