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April 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting. Quite dark, but captivating anyway. There was a lot of action in this chapter. I\'m also dissappointed that the crew was defeated so easily. It makes sense considering they are kids against grown-ups, but still . . . I look forward to updates.
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April 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Darn! That was quite a cliffhanger!
Is Lucius going to harm her?? I hope Draco/someone else comes to save her!
Good thing Snape stood up to him!
I\'m anxiously waiting for your next chapter.
Love Leonora.
Is Lucius going to harm her?? I hope Draco/someone else comes to save her!
Good thing Snape stood up to him!
I\'m anxiously waiting for your next chapter.
Love Leonora.
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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was such a sweet chapter! I loved that he actually apologized to the girl! Good job.
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April 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter! I like that you have Draco questioning himself and his motives like this - thumbs up to Flora.
Keep up the good work :o)
Love Leonora.
Keep up the good work :o)
Love Leonora.
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
was up with the low count of reviews? this fic is great! i love the way draco has to be true to himself rather then follow his fathers footsteps. good work!
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April 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! That was a great chapter, mazza_man!
I love how you have Draco torn between his old self and his new. And I especially loved the way Kay acted towards him - I\'m sure she really got to him with that.
Even though I don\'t think that canon Harry would act like this towards Draco - whom he loathes - I like what it\'s doing to Draco... it\'s putting him in a dilemma that Harry is actually being nice towards him.
Keep up the great work!
Love Leonora.
I love how you have Draco torn between his old self and his new. And I especially loved the way Kay acted towards him - I\'m sure she really got to him with that.
Even though I don\'t think that canon Harry would act like this towards Draco - whom he loathes - I like what it\'s doing to Draco... it\'s putting him in a dilemma that Harry is actually being nice towards him.
Keep up the great work!
Love Leonora.
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April 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good to see you back!
Nice to see Draco being torn between his old fa
Nice to see Draco being torn between his old fa
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March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey there!
I\'m back again, and I did have a nice vacation. How great to be returning to three new chapters.
I love the way the story is going, and I like the little twist of Severus\' and Lucius\' relationship, but I have a few questions/notes for you:
I\'m not sure how Kay found out that Draco once got turned into at ferret - it\'s a bit too much of a coincidence if she doesn\'t know, and calls him Ferretboy - maybe she is able to read minds? Maybe that\'s what happens when she looks into Harry\'s eyes?
I think that Draco turns a bit too sweet, too soon - I like the whole idea of him changing for the better, but it\'s like it happens too easily. And I don\'t think he would just let Kay tease him and call him \"Ferretboy\", in front of his classmates and the golden trio... I think that the \"Ferretboy\"-name really strikes a nerve, since it was quite an embarasing event for him to be turned into a Ferret as a punishment for bothering Harry. I think an argument/powerstruggle between Draco and Kay would have been appropriate... I think that if he allowed her to call him Ferretboy, it would only be while they were alone.
But like I said - I really like the idea of Draco changing for the better, and besides the teasing and name-calling, I really like where your story is going. I think Harry\'s interest in Kay/her interest in him is very intreaguing, and I\'m looking forward to see where you\'re going with that.
Another two notes for you:
I don\'t think that Dumbledore would just mention the Order like that when everyone is around - I think he would definitely wait until they were in private.
If Lucius knew that Severus was a spy, I\'m sure he would have told Voldemort about it long ago - however strong his feelings might be (?) for the Severus, Lucius serves Voldemort with all of his heart - and besides: All of the work he does for Voldemort and all of the risks he takes for him would be pointless if he knew about a spy and didn\'t tell about it. You could still have the Lucius/Severus relationship, and you could still have Severus tell him that he made his choice years ago - just without mentioning him choosing sides, because I seriously don\'t think Lucius knows about that - he thinks that Severus still serves Voldemort.
Well - hope you don\'t mind me pointing out these things to you. All in all I really like your story, and I hope you keep up the good work.
Love Leonora.
I\'m back again, and I did have a nice vacation. How great to be returning to three new chapters.
I love the way the story is going, and I like the little twist of Severus\' and Lucius\' relationship, but I have a few questions/notes for you:
I\'m not sure how Kay found out that Draco once got turned into at ferret - it\'s a bit too much of a coincidence if she doesn\'t know, and calls him Ferretboy - maybe she is able to read minds? Maybe that\'s what happens when she looks into Harry\'s eyes?
I think that Draco turns a bit too sweet, too soon - I like the whole idea of him changing for the better, but it\'s like it happens too easily. And I don\'t think he would just let Kay tease him and call him \"Ferretboy\", in front of his classmates and the golden trio... I think that the \"Ferretboy\"-name really strikes a nerve, since it was quite an embarasing event for him to be turned into a Ferret as a punishment for bothering Harry. I think an argument/powerstruggle between Draco and Kay would have been appropriate... I think that if he allowed her to call him Ferretboy, it would only be while they were alone.
But like I said - I really like the idea of Draco changing for the better, and besides the teasing and name-calling, I really like where your story is going. I think Harry\'s interest in Kay/her interest in him is very intreaguing, and I\'m looking forward to see where you\'re going with that.
Another two notes for you:
I don\'t think that Dumbledore would just mention the Order like that when everyone is around - I think he would definitely wait until they were in private.
If Lucius knew that Severus was a spy, I\'m sure he would have told Voldemort about it long ago - however strong his feelings might be (?) for the Severus, Lucius serves Voldemort with all of his heart - and besides: All of the work he does for Voldemort and all of the risks he takes for him would be pointless if he knew about a spy and didn\'t tell about it. You could still have the Lucius/Severus relationship, and you could still have Severus tell him that he made his choice years ago - just without mentioning him choosing sides, because I seriously don\'t think Lucius knows about that - he thinks that Severus still serves Voldemort.
Well - hope you don\'t mind me pointing out these things to you. All in all I really like your story, and I hope you keep up the good work.
Love Leonora.
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March 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey!
I like the way your story is progressing.
So she\'s calling him \'little ferret\' as well? Glad he took it so well.
I\'m very curious about what\'s going to happen at Hogwarts, since he has built up this fa
I like the way your story is progressing.
So she\'s calling him \'little ferret\' as well? Glad he took it so well.
I\'m very curious about what\'s going to happen at Hogwarts, since he has built up this fa
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March 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Your story is great, so don\'t worry about it!
So they\'re going back to Hogwarts? That should be interesting!
Again **sorry I keep ranting about your story codes** but when you use the M/M code, people will expect a male-male pairing/relationship. I don\'t know if you have this in mind, but if you don\'t, some of the readers you attract with this code might be disappointed. I don\'t think the rape goes under this catagory, that\'s inc (incest) and not a real pairing. And since you don\'t go into a further discribtion of it - I don\'t know if you should use this code... maybe it should be \"non-graphic inc\" or \"inc mentioned\" or something like that.
Otherwise, I like the changes you made to your summary. And I\'m looking forward to reading more of your story. Keep up the good work!
Love Leonora.
So they\'re going back to Hogwarts? That should be interesting!
Again **sorry I keep ranting about your story codes** but when you use the M/M code, people will expect a male-male pairing/relationship. I don\'t know if you have this in mind, but if you don\'t, some of the readers you attract with this code might be disappointed. I don\'t think the rape goes under this catagory, that\'s inc (incest) and not a real pairing. And since you don\'t go into a further discribtion of it - I don\'t know if you should use this code... maybe it should be \"non-graphic inc\" or \"inc mentioned\" or something like that.
Otherwise, I like the changes you made to your summary. And I\'m looking forward to reading more of your story. Keep up the good work!
Love Leonora.