AFF Fiction Portal
person Haplo
schedule April 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have to say that I have mixed feelings with this story... It\'s a very good and original idea, but the grammatical and spelling mistakes make it not so fun to read.
I would suggest you get a beta to fix these and maybe put some more paragraphs in it, because these are a too big. I am not trying to be rude here, I am just trying to help you improve your writing style. Don\'t stop writing, practice makes perfect!
person Yana
schedule March 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i loved that story