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wow. continue please.

wow, i wanna see more flash backs of the school... I wanna know exactly what Hermione\'s Training was.

How come she only remembers it when she is sleeping?

I hope hermione can get some control back... It is so hard to watch her have to give up her free will to draco. I really like this fic so please update soon!

this fic is really disturbing.it gives little thought to the pleasure of a woman and allows rape and abuse and things that are both disgusting and disturbing. its revolting

Can you update a little faster? Lol, I really really enjoy yor story!

Your characters are either totally OOC or flat and devoid of personality. I agree with Stratyllis - Hermione has NO character in this fic, and she really could be replaced with a blow-up doll. Veela!Draco is missing his Draco-ness, and thus appears very flat and boring. As for your Snape/Pomfrey thing... Uh, what\'s with that? They\'re both completely out of character.

I don\'t understand why you made this a Draco/Hermione fic at all to be honest, seeing as you took away any shred of personality the characters once had. You could replace each protagonist\'s name with another character from the books, and the personalities would fit just as much - want a Veela!Flitwick/Lavender Brown fic, anyone? Just use Word\'s find and replace feature! Also, throwing in special powers and wings for everybody just reminded me of magical-girl-anime shows... And everyone over the age of eleven HATES magical-girl-anime.

For an example of a GOOD (albeit seemingly abandoned) D/Hr fic, search for \"Adamo Fidelitas\" by Pixiezombie. Compare your work with hers, and see where you\'ve gone wrong. >_>

OOOH! Update soon! I love it!

Also - It\'s \"enema\", not \"enigma\". www.dictionary.com is calling.

I can barely get through this, the sentence structure is just terrible. The short sentence fragments the plague your story really disrupts the flow of your words. The characters and plot are devoid of any development as well. I love D/Hr fics but this one lacks everything that draws the reader into liking the pairing. Your story need an incredible amount of work.

I dont understand the school part... but freakily enough i found myself being turned on by it.


please update fast!