rate_review Reviews

it\'s a good story. it\'s interesting and i like it. But please try to place your words nicely make sure there\'s no wrong spell words in a sentence it will throw off the original meaning of that entire sentence. I see it in some of your chapters. had to re-read the sentences to get what u trying to said. Some i don\'t even understand it so i just guess what you trying to tell us the reader. Anyways, it\'s a good piece. keep up the good work.

Okay, I just read 50 chapters inside of 5 straight hours so excuse some nonsensical statements here ^.^

I absolutely loved this. It\'s great to see a Snarry fic whose plot line strays from Poor&Abused! Harry or I\'ve-hated-him-for-5/6/7-years-but-now-I-realize-that-I\'ve-really-had-a-crush-on-him-all-this-time! Harry. Your first chapter was a little confusing at first but, of course, I figured it out (go me!)

And I must admit that I was a little weary about starting a 50 chapter fic, as a lot of authors tend to start to just drag things out for the hell of it after 20 or so but I\'m really glad that I kept reading-you did a great job at putting the twists and turns through the fic, instead of all in the first 5 chapters ^.^

Great job!! ^.^

xoxox,
Liz

Wow. That\'s still sad regarding Draco, but it totally fits withhis both being spoiled and abused---and into power, due to his powerlessness given what his own father sold him into. I would have hoped he would have listened to Severus---just because he could not have Sev, and Harry did, he returned to Voldie and sold Severus out, who had done what he could to help him for all his life?!?! All I could see in his defense, is that he could not be mentally sound, he must be irrationally imbalanced, given how he has grown up. But it is too sad...
And Harry---That was quite the nasty, cutting thing to say to Severus---He called Severus to task for what he did, and rightly so, but he also owes Severus quite an apology, for saying such horrid things to him, just because he was angry and moody from the pregnancy is no excuse for such cutting, destructive statement to Severus. He truly does owe Severus an apology, esp. since Sev gave him one for what he\'d done!

Ch 17 Poor Harry---Severus isn\'t being honest with him. Wonder what\'s up with that. Some type of slave thing? Or did Draco do it, just get a tattoo, and Sev is unaware? But that seems just too unlikely. And I have to wonder about who Draco is gonig to---Voldie, as a sex slave?
Or was he picked as a \'suitable mate\' for another DE? I can\'t imagine, though, with Lucius\' ego, that he would allow Draco to go to anyone with less standing, and the only one with more than Malfoy Sr. would be Voldie himself. And, since Severus has given Draco his word to protect him if he came to him, then why does Draco continue to go? Doesn\'t trust Severus\' ability to shield him, or protecting Severus? I am so glad that this fic is already done and I will have the answers as soon as I can get around to reading more---this feels like such a wonderful luxury!
I have to say that I think you have their characters \' behaviour donw pat, so true to canon if this type of thing could ever be allowed to happen in mainstream fic---you have portrayed it very well!

Ch. 41 I really love this fic, and thoroughly agree that your characters are true to canon form in their behaviour. The story is nicely complex, with a very interesting variety of plotlines. However, it would be much better if you would get a beta to correct the spelling and grammar errors, and fix the places where the wrong word was used---English has so many words that are spelled similarly but have utterly different meanings. Having a few typos is just fine, everyone makes them and they don\'t detract from the story, but beyond a certain point... At any rate, the story is interesting enough that even with the typos, I am glad this fic is published and out here for us to read...it is still decidedly better than many!

I loved the ending. In my opinion, the longer the story, the better. I loved reading your story, and a fitting end to Draco. He seemed like he was indestructable, Harry proved that he wasn\'t.

Hey Babe,
Couldn\'t help myself, but I loved the story so much that I\'ve copyed it all and book binded it.
New intallation, need new installation.
Truthally babe you are quite a great writer. You should go in professionally.

Beautiful.

Well done! You are so creative and imaginative. Your muse has to be fucking unbelievable! All those intriguing suprises that keep popping up along the way really keeps you on edge. Lovely! The two scenes I like the most are Harry\'s and Sev\'s first \'real\' kiss and when Sevvie \'dies\'(fuck, you scared me on that one!). Though, I think that if I hadn\'t started reading this when it was already completed I would have gone crazy; cause sometimes the chappies are just a bit too short. All in all, I think it is brilliant. I could hardly tear myself away from the computor until I had finished reading it.

And you know, I loved Draco in this fic. (Though I don\'t blame you for killing him, hell I wanted him dead too.) His life must have been a pure hell. God I hate Lucius! Selling his OWN SON as a PLAYTHING for TOM FUCKING RIDDLE. I wish I could strangle him with my bare hands. Seeing how Draco was around Snape, and then seeing how he turned out in the end; horrible. I wish I could give him a hug, though he would probably hex my ass if I did.