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by belladonnacordial

person Sakya
schedule March 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is great. I love this story.

Please, more.
person Fefs
schedule March 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this is just too good! Please update soon! So cool to se this experimental Harry... Hugs!
person thrnbrooke
schedule March 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Holy moly! That is powerful! Both of them have all four founders? Harry has Grindlewald as well plus Dumbledore? Wow! Bring on the next chapter! I can\'t wait for more! If they join sides things might work for the best!
schedule March 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*Disclaimer: This review is just my own two cents. Follow it or ignore at your own whim.*

First of all, this really isn\'t believeable Harry/Draco. Draco isn\'t the kind of person to form his own thoughts unless the truth is shoved in his face. He sees the world in black and white, no middle ground, so I can never see him as being with Harry at all unless it\'s just a stupid one-shot deal. As for Harry, he\'s stubborn and may not be willing to accept that people change, so even if Draco was different, he wouldn\'t believe it.

Secondly, all the family history shit I read today makes no sense. I don\'t understand how magic could \"die out\" in a family line just because a squib marries a muggle. And, though Hermione is very powerful, I still think that halfbloods have the potential to be even moreso. Just look at Voldemort, after all.

Also, I doubt that Hogwarts would test students for magical potential. It would only lead to students bragging and picking on one another based on who had more potential than other people. The teachers may know, true, but they wouldn\'t talk about it openly.

That all being said, I do like your writing style and I\'m probably going to keep reading this just for shits and giggles. It\'s not bad, just implausible.

CP the critic
person Yana
schedule March 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ooo go Draco
person Yana
schedule March 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
cool story
i love dominant Draco
person ladyicondraco
schedule March 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
CURSE YOU!! Why must you leave it there! I love this so far. Your description of the status quo was excellent!
person DM
schedule March 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YAY! More! More! More!
person thrnbrooke
schedule March 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Harry\'s out on his own! And he sent the crystal! Too wonderful! Can\'t wait until chapter 4! Keep up the fantastic work!
person PrideAndPrejudice
schedule March 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
love the story. love the idea. love the writing style...pretty much love everything.......don\'t love clifeies(sp) though. even though they keep me reading i still hate them. but you do an excellent job on them and on updating so i\'m willing to let it slide....keep up the good work. later days and KUDOS!
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