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seriously, im getting irritated now...you said there would be an update in like a week or so but there is none.

It's writer-in-waiting again. I've been meaning to do this for quite some time now because I enjoyed your story so much, but I have put if off for more reasons than one. For one thing, I haven't seriously reviewed anyone in a long while so I might be a bit rusty. Secondly, I always find giving suggestions to an author quite strange because I always feel like I am criticizing the work. Lastly, me previous ventures in reviewing got me flames and angry messages from the author's friends because they felt as if I was being too harsh. Well if tehy'd cease with teh fecking mary Sues maybe I would have been less blunt. Anyway that's int he past and I am over it for the most part but I haven't seriously reviewed any story in a looong time. But I feel like oyu deserve it and I feel awful for putting it off for so long. Forgive me, but yeah I am lazy.

So since I came into reading the story around the sixteenth chapter, most of it had already been written so avoided reviewing because I felt like it was nearly finished. However, after careful reconsideration, I've thrown that out the door and decided to go and review every chapter. Granted, I'm no master in writing nor am I the best effin' reviewer ever, but I know authors truly appreciate any and all reviews

Chapter 1

Hello out there! You do realize it's been almost eleven months since you last updated? Are you alive and well? I don't mean to sound impatient, but your readers are awaiting your return!

Fascinating story. I believe the real charm of this story is the uniqueness of it. Usually Draco/Hermione stories start out trying to make me buy into the fact that Draco and Hermione have had this long standing obsession with each other, or this flash of insight into how wonderful the other one is. Needless to say, I've never been very convinced as this isn't one of my top (but not my worst) couplings. Even though, in this chapter you did describe that Draco always had the obsession with Hermione, taking it from the first part of the story's perspective, I really love how you built up their relationship and their attraction to one another. I had feared from Chapter 1 that it would fall into the category of obsession [love] at first sight, but then you made Alex her chosen crush, and developed everything quite wonderfully. The turn the story has taken is not completely abrupt, as you did ease the way into it, and though I'm sad for the lost of the comedy and light heartedness of the beginning chapters, this is all turning out quite nicely. I'm not sure why Snape decided to wipe Harry's memories, and why Harry isn't more angry at the fact that he did, since Harry could have helped in keeping Draco and Hermione away from each other (although he did so probably unconciously). Also glad for the fact that Harry is able to care for Draco still, despite all that is happening. The Lavender thing was surprising, and yet another uniqueness of this story, and one that I don't entirely mind since I dislike Ginny. I like the Lucius chapter too, that was a neat little show into Draco sinking into darkness. Wonderful job and I look forward to more. I do hope that you are able and willling to restore the light heartedness from before, while keeping in mind this darkness, so that we can have an ending with a true shade of gray.

This story has me tickled pink. But where is the rest. Would love to see how it ends.

I know theres been a million update! posts, but please?? Jeez, it's been 9 months since the last one. Are u going to finish it or not? At least tell us if it'll be a while, if not don't lead people on saying itll only be a week or two.

Update, please!

we're in the same predicament as last year. Oh well, this story is really amazing and I can wait for an update. You should reallyjust post your chapter the way it is, if the betas have not responded to you by now, they probably won't. I mean, anything you write is bound to be amazing, I have no idea why you doubt yourself so much.

Any chance you update soon? We can't waite!

Unfinished fan fiction stories make baby jesus cry.


That is all.