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for What you never thought you\'d be.

by kialiana999

person Megan Consoer
schedule November 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person Megan Consoer
schedule August 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person jessfelton
schedule November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
u have to update omg that was such a fucking fantastic first chappie i loved it
person Candy b
schedule September 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please write more I hate to read a very good unfinished story
person Anon
schedule March 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
HURRY HURRY hurry
person LadyMalfoy
schedule March 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It\'s good so far. Just check your spelling and don\'t rush things. Tsk tsk Hermione for acting so easy in his dreams! She better not be that way in real life! Update soon!
person lilil
schedule March 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very Nice! Well, Cant say much..........So better update next chap soon hie hie hie
person liz
schedule March 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is an awsome story iv hade dreams like that bout my worst enemy and we aint enemys no more (winks) anyways keep up the good work i give it 5 stars.
person Anon
schedule March 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Kind of a short chapter. I don\'t get what the plot its, but it is only the first chapter so...

You should proof read a bit more. There were simple mistakes such as switching \"buy\" with \"by\" that should not exist. (And \"dam\" should be \"damn\") Spell check on MSWord or whatever program you use won\'t catch things like that, make sure you, or a beta does.

Also the \"my lady\" and \"oh Draco\"/\"oh Hermione\" can get really cliche, really fast, so be careful how you use common phrases like these.

I\'m really interested based on your summary where this story will go, so please update! Besides, as annoying as the phrase is, its very true. \"Practice makes perfect.\"