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February 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
an ok begining, but you really need to take out the shorthand when you publish, spell out the word YOU instead of u. I noticed you did that a couple of times, as a reader (and this is my opinion) it really distracts from the story and it seems kinda childish to me. But overall, not a bad start. Good luck with the rest of your fic.
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February 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
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February 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Interesting start. I hope you'll update soon as I'd like to see what she does for his birthday. =)
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February 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i love it!
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February 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
that is HOT!
you will update sooner than before aren't you?
you will update sooner than before aren't you?
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May 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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December 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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March 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DAMN I WISH I WERE HERMIONE!!!!!! Thats really HOT!!!!!Please updaate soon!!!!!
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March 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad. Not bad at all. I like it, are you goingot continue?
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March 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
well it was quick and right to the point....i like thigns building up and this story didn\'t do that.....you were good with the wording though...keep it up! sorry didn\'t mea nto be harsh but trying to tell ya what i think becasue my opinion matters:) love ya