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September 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Damn! He\'ll make Ginny forget! Harry would help Draco. Pansy and Blaise now know its Draco. Need chapter 15! What happens next?
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August 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh holy moly! First Draco becomes himself and then he returns to Silver. Orion is in the school. He\'s made Hermione a spy. Oh wow! I need chapter 14!
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August 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, don\'t worry about the joke - I over-reacted.
About Russia - believe me (as a former Russian) - it\'s illigal. Murder is illegal in Russia (as in most civilized countries), and this includes one\'s wife. It\'s not frowned upon - it\'s punishable by law, as any other murder. I might not know about every part of the many countries that were part of Russia till the split of the Union, but in what is called \"Russia\" currently, murder is illegal. I\'m really surprised about what the Amnesty guy tolld you - sounds like people are describing a land with no civilization and law. Silly, really. It\'s just a place like any other, it\'s not even a third world country. Anyway, no big deal, just though you should know.
I\'m really worried about Silver forgetting who he is - poor Draco. Is it even going to be reversible? I hope so... I miss his fiesty spirit...
About Russia - believe me (as a former Russian) - it\'s illigal. Murder is illegal in Russia (as in most civilized countries), and this includes one\'s wife. It\'s not frowned upon - it\'s punishable by law, as any other murder. I might not know about every part of the many countries that were part of Russia till the split of the Union, but in what is called \"Russia\" currently, murder is illegal. I\'m really surprised about what the Amnesty guy tolld you - sounds like people are describing a land with no civilization and law. Silly, really. It\'s just a place like any other, it\'s not even a third world country. Anyway, no big deal, just though you should know.
I\'m really worried about Silver forgetting who he is - poor Draco. Is it even going to be reversible? I hope so... I miss his fiesty spirit...
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June 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
I\'ve been reading your fic and I like it a lot.
But I must say - the scene with figuring out Draco\'s sex... I don\'t see it in terms of animal abuse, but I am saying that if you wanted it to be a funny joke - it didn\'t quite work out. It gave the impression of: humiliation (a lot of it), rape (as in - forced into an unwanted sexual act), and some bondage. That is just the impression it gives. Using word like \"nightmare\" and showing how Silver was distraught afterwards - it\'s just not funny at all. It\'s realistic, and that is wxactly the point - it really wasn\'t funny for him. Saying that it\'s o.k. because he is a horny 17 year old makes no sence - if someone is 17, he cannot be abused by being forced into sex? Imagine a huge person, one you hate, with too much strength, like Hagrid, actually touching him while he can do nothing - it\'s not funny.
Oh, and by the way - what gave you the impression that it\'s permitted to kill your wife in Russia? Hope you were joking there. Because if not - you really ofended me.
I\'ve been reading your fic and I like it a lot.
But I must say - the scene with figuring out Draco\'s sex... I don\'t see it in terms of animal abuse, but I am saying that if you wanted it to be a funny joke - it didn\'t quite work out. It gave the impression of: humiliation (a lot of it), rape (as in - forced into an unwanted sexual act), and some bondage. That is just the impression it gives. Using word like \"nightmare\" and showing how Silver was distraught afterwards - it\'s just not funny at all. It\'s realistic, and that is wxactly the point - it really wasn\'t funny for him. Saying that it\'s o.k. because he is a horny 17 year old makes no sence - if someone is 17, he cannot be abused by being forced into sex? Imagine a huge person, one you hate, with too much strength, like Hagrid, actually touching him while he can do nothing - it\'s not funny.
Oh, and by the way - what gave you the impression that it\'s permitted to kill your wife in Russia? Hope you were joking there. Because if not - you really ofended me.
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'ve read up to chapter 11. You really and truly do have a remarkable story.
But, the formatting and editing makes it difficult to follow at times; there is verb
tense confusion as well as the feeling there are missing sentences, since I often
felt I had missed something.
Remember: break up the big paragraphs when you change ideas, points of view,
etc.; space between paragraphs for readability; and, edit and spell-check. This isn\'t
a flame; this is constructive criticism so that you construct some interest prose that
is very engaging and reabable.
But, the formatting and editing makes it difficult to follow at times; there is verb
tense confusion as well as the feeling there are missing sentences, since I often
felt I had missed something.
Remember: break up the big paragraphs when you change ideas, points of view,
etc.; space between paragraphs for readability; and, edit and spell-check. This isn\'t
a flame; this is constructive criticism so that you construct some interest prose that
is very engaging and reabable.
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Babe, you know you\'re missing a chapter, right? Cahpter 12 only has your A/N notes and responces to reviews. No actual story.
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wonderful story, complex but brilliant. ahhh you did have to let him change back without harry seeing him. keep up the good work i love this story
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
love the story so far, but where is chapter 12?
I just read all of it and my only complaint is that there is no harry draco action-in fact there is barely a Draco! please get to the food part soonish...please
I just read all of it and my only complaint is that there is no harry draco action-in fact there is barely a Draco! please get to the food part soonish...please
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June 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A point of clarity: When you decide to edit or repost this story,
break up your paragraphs, even go for single spacing between paragraphs.
It gets very hard to read when the paragraphs are so large; it almost induces
a headache trying to keep the the lines of text coherent.
break up your paragraphs, even go for single spacing between paragraphs.
It gets very hard to read when the paragraphs are so large; it almost induces
a headache trying to keep the the lines of text coherent.
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June 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Can\'t wait for chapter 12! Will Harry start to get a clue in that chapter?