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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Alright, I was in a snarky mood when I first reviewed.... so lemmie try again with a clear mind.
I still think the people are way out of character, the mastubation scene was a lil too much for me to suspend my belief, and the Veela/Mate idea is a lil confusing.
I also think you need to explain the law. Are the mates supposed to be forced into being in contact with their Veela? Why has no one fought for their rights?
I still like the different Veela idea, dark and light, and the writing is well done if not a little fast.
I still think the people are way out of character, the mastubation scene was a lil too much for me to suspend my belief, and the Veela/Mate idea is a lil confusing.
I also think you need to explain the law. Are the mates supposed to be forced into being in contact with their Veela? Why has no one fought for their rights?
I still like the different Veela idea, dark and light, and the writing is well done if not a little fast.
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May 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Everyone is seriously out of character. I\'d never see Harry acting in such a way, or Hermione for that matter. And when Dumbledore broke down to Malfoy\'s threats (in the \"Moral etc\" chapter, that was out of character too. And I still see no valid reason for the Trio to break down... they drifted apart? After all the horrors they\'ve gone through together? Seems like a weak argument....
I also don\'t understand the concept of Veela and their mates.... you said they each had a mate to call their own.... so why are Harry and Draco chasing the same woman? It doesn\'t make sense to me....
I loved the concept of the light and dark veela, and the writing is good. But for a woman to not notice a man\'s penis in her hand? He couldn\'t have been immobile in her hand. That\'s a lil hard to swallow (no pun intended).
I also don\'t understand the concept of Veela and their mates.... you said they each had a mate to call their own.... so why are Harry and Draco chasing the same woman? It doesn\'t make sense to me....
I loved the concept of the light and dark veela, and the writing is good. But for a woman to not notice a man\'s penis in her hand? He couldn\'t have been immobile in her hand. That\'s a lil hard to swallow (no pun intended).
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh. Thank you, that is sweet! I can deal with bi *coughs*I am bi*coughs* Hm... as long as the former-lesbian isn\'t forced, I guess that\'s fine. Yay! DA payback. Kick their misogynistic asses, wh00t! Tsk tsk, no oatmeal? I have the MOST DELICIOUS chocolate cookie recipe that uses rolled oats (not the quick cooking ones), bananas instead of eggs, and split sugar (half white or turbinado, half dark brown). It\'s a vegan one, but can be enjoyed by all. *grumbles* I guess I can make my grandma\'s christmas cookie cutter ones... it\'s a thick butter cookie with flavored icing. I haven\'t found another cc cookie recipe that\'s sans oatmeal, sorry. But I do have a present for you, I remembered a page a friend sent me on Vagina Dentata (the toothed vagina) after I saw the title of Hermione\'s book. It\'s all about feeling comfortable with one\'s body, particularly down there, and they quote \'the vagina monologues\' while talking about rape. It\'s really interesting if you\'ve never come across it before. http://harlequinade.zeetee.com/gorgon/vagina.html I am still waiting for Minerva to read Albus the riot act when she finds out. Hell, I\'m hoping she blows up at all of them minus Hermione. My sympathies on your crashed computer. My hard drive is slowly dying by making funny noises and freezing at the most inopportune times. No loss of data yet, and there\'s already a replacement, but it hasn\'t been installed yet.
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hmmmm, another stellar work of art. the nine are THE nine muses of Greek Mythology. may they patron your work forever. I really, oh god, REALLY, want to know WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN WHEN DRACO AND HARRY REALIZE THEY BOTH LOVE HERMOINE. i am dying here. withering away. seriously. btw, thanks for the email, this is a lovely story, hot, intense, wonderful. if you don\'t update, I find you and make ya update. please. with cherries and chocolate and carmel and vanilla and cinnamon and nutmeg and oh those mint things with chocolate creme fillings. I uh....got to go now....I made myself hungry.
Much Love and Blessed be the Nine,
Eddie
Much Love and Blessed be the Nine,
Eddie
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Bummer about the hard drive. I hope now that you have a working computer updates will be more frequent. This was a great chapter and I look foreward to more.
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
love it
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great to see you back! I have really enjoyed your story so far. I have always enjoyed the angst between Harry and Draco, and I love to see them fight over the same girl. Although, I must say that I hope you do a DM/Hr/HP thing. You know-unite the kingdoms, blah blah. Also-it\'s real hot.
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
More more more! :(
Nice chapter, interesting how Hermione seems so very horny in her sleep ;).
KEEP WRITING!!!! :D
Nice chapter, interesting how Hermione seems so very horny in her sleep ;).
KEEP WRITING!!!! :D
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really dont want Harry to get her! please let Draco Win!
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May 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Loving this story, although the knot idea just doesn\'t sit well with me >_<
Keep the updates coming :D
Keep the updates coming :D