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My dear I am not trying to be mean, it is only that you should not use \'u\' instead of writing out the word, \'you\'. I have problems with my spelling as well, I have found that having a friend look it over works wonders or even running it through a spell checker. Do try again with this, I am sure you can get it to work for you. But for right now, it needs a bit of work.

sounds like its gonna be a great story, cant wait for more!

I am not sure if you story has any merit yet but I would advise you to get a beta fast! Your spelling is quite atrocious and the actual grammar is rather weak. You seem to be rushing the plot to get to the gore when you could be spending some time developing a plot. Everyone agrees that Dumbledore is a manipulative old pest but he is never less than kind and concerned.

Ok, you mentioned that this is your first fic, so please don\'t take this wrong, but you need to get a beta. They are pretty easy to find. But they would help you out alot! There are quite a few spelling mistakes that could easily be fixed to make your story so much easier to read. Also, in a story... type out \"you\" instead of just putting a \"U\". It makes it look alot more professional.

Alright, now that, the suggestions are done, I will say that you\'ve got a nice start to a plot. Just make sure as you keep writing that you explain why Ron and Hermoine no longer have time for their best friend and why Dumbledore wouldn\'t even check up on him. I\'ll be interested to see how you write the rest of this story. :)