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August 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey Rain . . . whatever that one person said about Hermione being weak and to susceptible to Malfoy\'s orders . . . psha, whatever. . . Even strong girls become weak when emotions and feelings and men are concerned - it takes a hard lesson to garner the strength to say no, even if it\'s a mistake to say so . . . so whatever that person said, again, psha whatever. . . This is a high emotion intense story! I would be quick to believe that if Hermione\'s family had been threatened, then she would lose a little bit of her natural color but that her drive to do right would be that much stronger . . . I think you\'re doing a great job with this story and don\'t let one or two silly reviewers get you down. If that were the case, I\'d have had to abandon fanfiction months ago for \'crappy stories and confusing lines and out of character lameness\' . . . Keep on keepin\' on! You\'re doing great! I love it!
SJ
SJ
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August 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love it! Please keep it coming. Very interesting insights and super hot lovin\'.
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August 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
How do you do it?? You have got to be one of the only authors who can have me so completly wrapped up in the story that I will forget all else. Please keep going. This story is fantastic. Although Im worried about Ron, you\'re not gonna make Hermione break his heart are you, cause thats always so sad. Oh well if it happens it happens. All chapters were top notch. Everything kicks ass!!!!
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August 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
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August 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You had me with the first paragraph.
I swear to God, by the first paragraph I was so into this that I couldn\'t stop reading if the devil came to rip my from my seat himself. Oh my FRIGGIN\' God. Awesome, awesome writing. I mean, seriously. You\'re style is fucking amazing. It\'s so unlike what we usually so--so unlike the usually paragraphs and italics for thoughts and gasps and groans. I swear, you\'re friggin\' fantastic, and I love you for writing this.
Possessive Draco, by far, is my favorite Draco (Draco the cynic is second). And I loved how you wrote Malfoy saving Hermione time and time again, and how this little... *thing* between them has been building up for years. I love how he just pulls her into classrooms and stuff. I mean, God, he\'s Draco fucking Malfoy. And you write him so well: he\'s smart, graceful, an asshole--everything a good D/Hr writer should have Draco be. All I could think of while I was reading is: Omg, he\'s so fucking hot. He\'s so fucking hot. I was getting hot and bothered over your little lime scenes and omg, they didn\'t even sleep together yet!!!
And your dialogue is absolutely marvelous. There are far too many fics out there that have the characters OOC when writing dialogue. And while, generally speaking, the characters in you fic are OOC (but this really doesn\'t apply much, seeing as their personalities have adapted to fit their current siuations--i.e. Hermione learning martial arts in order to feel safe after being abducted by death eaters), your dialogue is unbelievable. I love Draco and Hermione\'s conversations. You can always sense the passion behind them, and the tension--God, the tension! You\'re gonna make me have a heart attack by the time this is finished.
And I absolutely ADORE a hurt Draco. Hermione hurt his feelings and his entire attitude changed because of it, which shows the depth of his feelings for her and what affect her words and actions have on his... demeanor (I\'m not exactly sure if that\'s the right word, and I\'m far too riled up to dwell on it). I like how you have Neville portraying him as well (and my God! I nearly screamed when Neville asked Harry when Ron was going to ask Hermione out!)
When Draco said he wanted to rip Zabini\'s eyes out (or some other foul, painful thing) for staring at Hermione... I swear, you had me there too. It really gets me though, how Hermione is so oblivious to her good looks when everyone is noticing--even friggin\' Snape (even though I find *that* to be a particularly frightening thought).
This fic is dark, and it goes into issues that a lot of writers usually only skim upon. I love how possessive Draco is in this, and how dark the romance is. And Hermione is so well written; despite what she thinks--all the answers she comes up with to Draco\'s questions, she always says something completely different, never giving him, I think, what he wants to hear.
And when Malfoy had her up against the wall, holding her like she was the last thing he could cling to until he fell into some bottomless abyss (forgive me, I think I\'m getting poetic here), and said that he could deny her nothing... Jesus Christ, had I not been sitting, I surely would\'ve fallen. I could feel that sensation that you get when your knees get weak, and I swear, despite his desperation, it was so unbelievably *sexy* You wouldn\'t believe how hot and bothered that made me. Jeez. I don\'t think my fan is turned up high enough for me to be reading things like this.
Wrapping this thing up, I think that you\'re a marvelous writer, and that you\'ve definitely strung your words together well with this one. I was so intrigued by this. I\'ve been teetering near exhaustion for the longest yet when I came upon this there was no way in HELL I was going to stop reading.
Anyway, I\'ll say it again: Awesome work. And I seriously can\'t wait until you grace us with an update.
Fantastic work!
Truth
I swear to God, by the first paragraph I was so into this that I couldn\'t stop reading if the devil came to rip my from my seat himself. Oh my FRIGGIN\' God. Awesome, awesome writing. I mean, seriously. You\'re style is fucking amazing. It\'s so unlike what we usually so--so unlike the usually paragraphs and italics for thoughts and gasps and groans. I swear, you\'re friggin\' fantastic, and I love you for writing this.
Possessive Draco, by far, is my favorite Draco (Draco the cynic is second). And I loved how you wrote Malfoy saving Hermione time and time again, and how this little... *thing* between them has been building up for years. I love how he just pulls her into classrooms and stuff. I mean, God, he\'s Draco fucking Malfoy. And you write him so well: he\'s smart, graceful, an asshole--everything a good D/Hr writer should have Draco be. All I could think of while I was reading is: Omg, he\'s so fucking hot. He\'s so fucking hot. I was getting hot and bothered over your little lime scenes and omg, they didn\'t even sleep together yet!!!
And your dialogue is absolutely marvelous. There are far too many fics out there that have the characters OOC when writing dialogue. And while, generally speaking, the characters in you fic are OOC (but this really doesn\'t apply much, seeing as their personalities have adapted to fit their current siuations--i.e. Hermione learning martial arts in order to feel safe after being abducted by death eaters), your dialogue is unbelievable. I love Draco and Hermione\'s conversations. You can always sense the passion behind them, and the tension--God, the tension! You\'re gonna make me have a heart attack by the time this is finished.
And I absolutely ADORE a hurt Draco. Hermione hurt his feelings and his entire attitude changed because of it, which shows the depth of his feelings for her and what affect her words and actions have on his... demeanor (I\'m not exactly sure if that\'s the right word, and I\'m far too riled up to dwell on it). I like how you have Neville portraying him as well (and my God! I nearly screamed when Neville asked Harry when Ron was going to ask Hermione out!)
When Draco said he wanted to rip Zabini\'s eyes out (or some other foul, painful thing) for staring at Hermione... I swear, you had me there too. It really gets me though, how Hermione is so oblivious to her good looks when everyone is noticing--even friggin\' Snape (even though I find *that* to be a particularly frightening thought).
This fic is dark, and it goes into issues that a lot of writers usually only skim upon. I love how possessive Draco is in this, and how dark the romance is. And Hermione is so well written; despite what she thinks--all the answers she comes up with to Draco\'s questions, she always says something completely different, never giving him, I think, what he wants to hear.
And when Malfoy had her up against the wall, holding her like she was the last thing he could cling to until he fell into some bottomless abyss (forgive me, I think I\'m getting poetic here), and said that he could deny her nothing... Jesus Christ, had I not been sitting, I surely would\'ve fallen. I could feel that sensation that you get when your knees get weak, and I swear, despite his desperation, it was so unbelievably *sexy* You wouldn\'t believe how hot and bothered that made me. Jeez. I don\'t think my fan is turned up high enough for me to be reading things like this.
Wrapping this thing up, I think that you\'re a marvelous writer, and that you\'ve definitely strung your words together well with this one. I was so intrigued by this. I\'ve been teetering near exhaustion for the longest yet when I came upon this there was no way in HELL I was going to stop reading.
Anyway, I\'ll say it again: Awesome work. And I seriously can\'t wait until you grace us with an update.
Fantastic work!
Truth
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August 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
CH 8 -
RAIN!
LOL! I\'m SO, SO SORRY. I thought I\'d reviewed the other day and I didn\'t! Bad me!
Anyway, amazing chapter darling! I loved it and Draco...WOW. His power, his devotion to Hermione and keeping her safe.
The way Hermione chose not to examine Draco\'s revelations to her too closely in front of him, least she show some kind of emotion that she\'s not ready for him to see!
Sigh!
Love it!
Wonderfully done and I don\'t think that Draco was too ooc. I mean, him being with and into Hermione is enough OOC for us! And we don\'t care, right? We love him anyway! So, this just went along beautifully and the words were captivating and emotional and beautiful.
Great job, as always darlin, you\'re one of the best!
Can\'t wait for the next chapter...and hey - how\'s bout a little JEALOUSY! My FAV of your stories!
MWAP!
L
RAIN!
LOL! I\'m SO, SO SORRY. I thought I\'d reviewed the other day and I didn\'t! Bad me!
Anyway, amazing chapter darling! I loved it and Draco...WOW. His power, his devotion to Hermione and keeping her safe.
The way Hermione chose not to examine Draco\'s revelations to her too closely in front of him, least she show some kind of emotion that she\'s not ready for him to see!
Sigh!
Love it!
Wonderfully done and I don\'t think that Draco was too ooc. I mean, him being with and into Hermione is enough OOC for us! And we don\'t care, right? We love him anyway! So, this just went along beautifully and the words were captivating and emotional and beautiful.
Great job, as always darlin, you\'re one of the best!
Can\'t wait for the next chapter...and hey - how\'s bout a little JEALOUSY! My FAV of your stories!
MWAP!
L
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August 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is one of my most favoritist stories on this friggin website. I might have said that already, but that doesnt make it less true. I practically wept!
I think I reviewed already, but im doin it again!
Mo
I think I reviewed already, but im doin it again!
Mo
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August 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yayyyyyyyy a new chappie!!! Wow I loved that chapter! Hermione storming in like that and her and Pansy going at it lol that was great. But the best was Draco\'s word\'s of concern for Hermione, I just loved that part. And then the whole Lupin capture, I just can\'t wait to see what happens! I love this fic and you\'ve done a wonderful job so far. ~*~Shannon~*~
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
All I can say is wow... that\'s it just wow. This has to be one of the best plots I have ever read. Hermione wearing muggle clothes and using muggle things is a angle that I never sought to explore. Updates are a MUST! I need another update so please hurry!!! ^_^
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Amazing - this chapter is my favorite. You put so much into so little. I love the idea that it\'s actually Slyterin who feel\'s prejudiced against. Brilliant actaully. Draco is so complex, everything is becomeing more complex and that is a wonderful twist. you are right: Hogwarts isn\'t a fairytale and Hermionie probably does need to realize that. I just hope you have them hash out thier feelings: explain why he was being so git-esque and have her tell him how much she likes him. AHHH! I\'m just dancing after this chapter. Please update soon!!