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for In My Mind

by lightgoddess

schedule May 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ooh that was wonderful! I love it so! Cant wait for another update
person Zak, just the gay guy & Ivan, Zak\'s other left hand
schedule May 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*squeals*

Omg... he actually squealed... like a little girl when he saw that you had replyed to the review... Like it was .... for fucks sake shut up Zak. He\'s currently on my lap (when is he not?) in nothing but a leather mini skirt. *coughs* lets just say his bits are falling out of the bottom. He\'s still spazing out... you see he\'s very happy today.

I SHAVED EVERYTHING

he\'s told everyone the today... the mail man...

I SHAVED EVERYTHING!

the girl next door

EVERYTHING I TELL YOU!

the kids in the park, and their mothers...

I SHAVED EVERYTHING! NO HAIR EXCEPT my nice purple mop.

You dyed your pubs purple too

Fuck, you did not just say that!

Yes I did, and it\'s true you dyed your pubs purple does that mean they are still there? Oh wait I can see all of you falling out of your skirt, definatly all purple hair is gone except on that pretty head of yours.

Ivan\'s leaving tomorrow for work, make him stay... and yes left-handed people do rule! *grins* Ivan\'s right handed but wanks with the left hand, I just am left handed. Ivan\'s just weird... oh god... fingers... wrap... oh fuck...

Before you say anything more Zak you\'ve been hard for like forever... so it\'s my turn to talk. (Yes I am wanking him off and typing with my right hand) I honestly think I\'m too comfortable with you, ms. author lady. i have to say that... zak here is getting his phd the little wanker is 29 years old, i\'m 31... we are not old at all, but zak is freaking out because he\'s gonna turn 30 soon. haha. if zak knew i told you our age he\'d be pissed. we don\'t live in the dorm, that is just what i\'ve grown to call our bedroom because the first time we had sex was in the dorm and i was always like, \'\'lets go to the dorm now zak\'\' back in the old days that was our code for \'\'sex, i want some\'\'. hehe, sooo thus ... this... has occured. zak is at my hand... he was so proud that he had taken the time to shave and wax everything. he doesn\'t like hair unless it\'s on your head. he doesn\'t like stubble and has forced me many times to shave my attempted patch of facial hair i grow on occasion. he only likes my blue hair. i don\'t dye my pubs though... honestly i have no idea why he did that... hold on I need to clean up the sofa... Zak kinda passed out... he was tired he stayed up all night writing and waxing/shaving.

I honestly think he got bored of writing his thesis (perhaps that\'s why he dyed his pubs that one day?). I dunno if he\'s going to finish it, he said he\'s \"Fed up\" and that he\'s \"tired of stupid science\"

Bah, he\'s just bitching.

Oh and good story (lol it\'s like an after thought, but truely the story is interesting!). I shall sign Zak\'s name...

~Zak, just the gay guy (Can you believe that he\'s getting his PhD? As sex obsessed as he is?)
-Ivan, Zak\'s other left hand (hehe, I like the name *winks* )
person akuma_river
schedule April 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
heh. kawaii.
schedule April 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay! An update! lol, I loved that chapter! But something wierd happened to me when i was reading it

\" Denial, Anger, Bargaining, Depression, and Acceptance\" Thats so wierd DABDA , I had a teacher that taught us that, I swear i almost wet myself when i read it, lol. How did you know DABDA?

Loved it! Hope for another update soon! - Jessica
person Papaya
schedule April 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good update! I really like the color-correspondence thing, and am looking forward to seeing how it plays out. Poor Severus, about to get the happiness he never wanted! The whole stages of acceptance thing is very appropriate: his old life is dying and he has to mourn it before he can enjoy his new one. Looking forward to the next update! As always, thank you for the wonderful entertainment and please update soon.
person Zak, just the gay guy
schedule April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
haha! You don\'t have any ideas how much you\'ve mades me giddy.

That was improper english Zak

Shut it. Before I was rudly intrupted! You are awesome, hahahaha, but I have to say you have to get Harry and sev to shag.

Is that all you have on your mind?

Yes

Why did I even ask

Not that you mind I mean look at you, all nude.

Only because when I got home you, the fool, tore all my clothes off and ruined my favorite pair of jeans

So? What\'s wrong with them? Now we can have sex easily because the front part is torn off.

Zak! It\'s the fact that you asulted me at the door, I still had my suitcase in my hand.

Shut up! You had all those hot Japanese men around you for a few days and what did I have? My left hand.

You know that I don\'t fool around with other men Zak. Or have you forgotten our small illegal wedding?

Of course I remember it Ivan! I love you, I just hate your job.

Well to fucking bad, I\'m a package deal here.

And quite a package you have too, mmm-hmmm must say that when you shave it\'s an even better ride.

Zak I\'m leaving now, get off my lap. Your being to open about our relationship

But darling! Love! Stop trying to get up, love...

Get up

Shhh...

GET UP

Ivan...

Zak please...

Ivan listen I didn\'t mean it, Ivannnn. I love you, of course you wouldn\'t cheat on me. And our relationship isn\'t based on sex, it\'s just an added feature. Deary you know that I love you. What would I do without you?

You\'d have quite a good relationship with your left hand, you weirdo.

I LOVE YOU SWEETY

Don\'t call me sweety

I LOVE YOU HUNNY CAKES

WTF? Hunny cakes? What have you been smoking? You haven\'t done drugs since we were kids.

Don\'t say that. I feel old

I dont\' think old is when you are t-

Don\'t say my age, I feeeeel old when you say it.

Shhhh, love, I am two years your senor and we aren\'t old until we reach twenty years older then what we are at the time.

Oh, that was tricky! You sly boy. So when we are 100 we won\'t be old till 120 and 101 = 121?

Oh not only is he good looking but he\'s intelligent *pats Zak\'s head*

Wrong head, you need to pat the one that is shaven.

ZAK!

What? *looks innocent*

Get up now and take me to the dorm, I haven\'t had sex in so long.

But I just masterbated like 1 and a half hours ago.

You fool you can get it up still as if you were still 17 even if you are t-

DON\'T SAY IT

Fine love, but you have to promise me TWO things

*Anything* Ivan, my master

First say I\'m sorry and bye to miss. author lady nicely then bend the fuck over.

I\'m sorry for the vulgar comments. BYE!

~Zak, just the gay guy
-Ivan
person moondancer
schedule April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
A wonderful story! I hope that Severus will soon come around with the fact of him becoming a father. Please continue soon!!
person Remus\'s Girl
schedule April 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very VEry good please write the next chappter soon!!
person ella
schedule April 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
your story is wicked it\'s so funny i couldn\'t stop laughing at the thought of snape calling dumbledore \'dumblee\' please update soon, ella xxxxxxxxxxx
person antipyro
schedule April 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great story line.

The imagination of Duncan and Harry\'s bright world is fantastic. I can\'t seem to help wondering why Severus and Harry can\'t \'feel\' each other more, kinda like a 6th sense thing.

Nice long chapters too, Hmmmm.

Lots of confections and plot bunnies your way.

Post sooon, this can only get better, in so many ways. Characterisations are excellent too.