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This is really good. Typical Snape behaving like that still. Lol. Hope the baby\'s born ok and Molie Voldie doesn\'t cause trouble. Looking forward to reading more.

This is really good. Typical Snape behaving like that still. Lol. Hope the baby\'s born ok and Molie Voldie doesn\'t cause trouble. Looking forward to reading more.

Ooh yay he\'s awake, he\'s awake! So are Remus and Hermione going to get together now too? There so cute together, i think lol.

I cant wait to see what happens once Duncan is born! Love it! - Jess

Interesting idea. Good story. There are alot of americanisms as well as idiomatic speech that I think is somewhat off. For instance, Snape saying \'okay\' as opposed to \'very well\' or \'all right\'- remeber his age and bearing as well as his general speech pattern. Also, if duality is going to be the deciding clue between Snape and Remus, I think the obvious choice there is Remus not Snape. Actually almost all of those charavteristics could fit the werewolf too. I think you would do better choosing another \'oooh\' factor and then explaining why this one means Snape rather than Remus or why that particular combination of characteristic does. I feel it is more the addition of authority and justice that indicates Snape rather than Lupin.

What can I say? Really cool. Hope no one\'s got a problem with Sev and Harry being together. Hope to see some romance between them soon. Hope they get Moldie Voldie outta Harry\'s head soon. Looking forward to reading more.

Omg... I talked in the 3rd person... I do that regularly... like I\'ll tell myself to shut up if I\'m singing or humming... but I try to not do it in reviews... I came back to see if anyone tried to top my review, no one can =P

Ok... so I just wanted to say... sorry for that... I messed that sentence up like some shit.

Heres what I MEANT to say

Have I ever told you that Ivan was my first and only shag? I let him take me from behind every time we had that foursome I was in the front of the train... Ivan behind me Pete behind Ivan and TREY in the back with a big vibrating bugplug up his ass... god we were yound and horny back then...

Not ZAK but TREY I mean... goodness that sentence was fucked up... sorry about that... I guess it was the pain pills for the tatoo I just got... (always blame it on the drugs) Okay... so... I\'m sooooooooo sorry... I feel like a total moron... I don\'t diserve to be your \"sexy little geisha\" *crys*

I want Ivan... he would\'ve pointed that out... come home already... I\'m not going to cry... I\'m not...

The problem is this time... he might have to pretend to be someones boyfriend... and have sex.... and... no I\'m not crying... Im not going to... it\'s just I feel like he might develop feelings and... run away... he has cheated on me before with a woman. And he can have the family he wants with her... I\'m sorry... I\'ll go now... I\'m actually... crying over something that hasn\'t happened, yet. I have to stop crying so much...

~Zak

omg! Isn\'t the silver snitch like the best? Lets just say Ivan isn\'t at home right now so... I\'ve been wanking quite a bit to certain *a-hem* stories and thoughts. It\'s sooo unfair! Ivan\'s gonna be gone for... for 3 weeks or more. I cried when he told me that. He said \"I love you dear\" and to \"not forget him\" or \"shag Trey\". Trey, funny guy, has always wanted to bugger me, he has a fetish... that I *cough* like to perform with Ivan... quite often. And lets just say... he walked in on us, he WAS one of our room mates. It was the four of us Trey, Pete, Ivan, and me. But now Ivan and I have an apartment. Ivan wants to adopt kids... I told him that I\'m not ready... that... god if I were to have children they\'d be whitnessing alot of sexin\' and masterbation.

Back in the day I use to have foursomes with Trey, Ivan, and Pete... but then I settled for Ivan. Have I ever told you that Ivan was my first and only shag? I let him take me from behind every time we had that foursome I was in the front of the train... Ivan behind me Pete behind Ivan and Zak in the back with a big vibrating bugplug up his ass... god we were yound and horny back then... now I\'m stuck with... Ivan *dies* just kidding. I love Ivan... God I love him to death.
Ivan hasn\'t been away from me for this long... and I just recently got a letter... from my parents... they disowned me... when... when they found out I was gay... I\'ve read the letter so many times... they said that it was my \"last chance to be part of the family\" that if I didn\'t \"atone for\" my \"sins now\" I would \"die a most painful death without family and burn in hell\" Ivan was gone and... god I\'m crying again... he couldn\'t comfort me. Ivan never had parents, but he understands me.

Okay enough sad talk *wipes eyes* this story is suburb. I like the color thing... yeah it\'s nifty.

I hope you continue soon... I can email Ivan... but I can\'t call (he\'s an under-cover cop) ... I... God if I ever... lose him... I\'ll be a sobbing misrable mess.
I guess my webcam will have to suffice... heh... he had to dye his hair a normal color though... it\'s a light chestnut color.

~Zak, your sexy little geisha =P

If you are intrested to know... I have purple hair, both nipples pierced, umm... several piercings that only Ivan will ever see (they hurt like hell when I got \'em), and some implanted things on my penis, I\'m short... and I\'m a sub... I\'m a horny bastard (Ivan\'s called me one on several occassions), I use color contacts alot, but I like to wear my glasses too, I tend to wear weird clothes like dark colors and leather, and always stuff that\'s tight, I do wear bright rainbow stuff... but I like the color black. I always have my aids ribbon on my purse. Yes I have a man purse... and even worse I made it. It\'s bright colored has rainbows and stripes and it\'s got all sorts of crazy patterns it\'s awesome. I also have ... umm.... both ears peirced... I\'m not your normal scientist. I have tatoos on my back and one of two naked men having sex tattooed on my... well... the place that pubic hair grows... I just got it. I got drunk with Pete about 4 days ago. I wanted to be the person who makes errotic toys for men and women but I thought that my parents would disown me... I hadn\'t told them about Ivan... so I just went into science and hoped for the best. So if you ever see or purchase a Zak\'s Toy Brand that\'d be mine... but I think I\'ll stick with science so I\'m not a total failure to my parents...

I\'m loving this story, all the little details are great, i love the mystry of it. I also like how you are writing the character. Please post again soon... definitly a story to continue and finish.

Took her long enough. Actually, when Sev and Remy were talking, I thought that Sev would say that he is Duncan\'s other father, and than Remus would slam him against a wall. Anyways, please update more, this story is addictive. What\'s the color for addiction?

More, More, More, More, More Please!!!!

This is just getting good. Love the \'Duncan\' role, it\'s so clever.

Please update soon.