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Sot down, Denied. I love when girls that think they are all that get shot down. I laughed my ass off. i can\'t wait to read 21 and 22.

your faithful follower
jeannette

Hello my darling girl!! How I love you and your story! FINALLY MY FAV SCENE IS HERE! The club scene and the destruction to come is nearing. I have to say the intensity of their meeting is conveyed so well! You make it so utterly believable that they feel so connected right off the bat, the instant attraction, the need to protect, the need to touch. Though really if I was in a room with Draco I wouldn\'t be able to not touch. I would touch and poke and prod and strip... okay wow got away from me there. I have to say I am eagerly awaiting the infamous BATHROOM SCENE. Yes I speak of the scene with Harry Potter in the bathroom about to get down and dirty with \'Draco\'s Girl\', and I use the term loosly as I am his girl. I love that scene because you write is sooooo well, but I guess I should save those comments for when the scene is actually posted eh?

Anyway, back to the task at hand. I read your page long review responses and I have to agree with you about you , me, alison, and Mrs. A. We certainly offer eachother support. I can always count on honest and helpful reviews from all of you!! Also, I agree with writing at a snail\'s pace. Sometimes the next chapter is sooooo elusive I beat and beat my muses and they refuse to produce anything. Like for example, I have a wonderful title for my NEXT series, and I cannot even think of the next sentence for my CURRENT series! I think I will fire my muses and hire new ones.

Okay, I think I seriously started rambling there. ANyway, I think I will take this time to mention that YES I LOVE TAD. He is such a minor character we shall call him a BUTTON character! But really you write him so annoyingly well! Makes me laugh to read his possessiveness. Like anyone really stands a chance against Draco!! Anyway, I think I have rambled WAYYYYYY too much. BIG HUG to you and I am sitting here waiting for any updates you choose to fire our way! I will read hapily!!!

Lots of love deary!
Ally

Chapter 20... First of all, I love that Laurel refers to Draco in her head as \"Blondie\" and \"HER BOY\". I thought this chapter was especially good at exploring how a sexy dress, a little alcohol and a dance beat (oh and don\'t forget raging hormones) can start to make you lower your inhibitions and your behavior gets a little more bold. Not that I think Laurel isn\'t a bold, assertive girl to begin with, but I suspect the combo of all those things are helping her be Possesive Girl and Bold Girl. Well that topped with Draco\'s sexy clothes, demeanor and smile...I certainly don\'t think I\'d behave any differently. I will now pause for a moment to think of Laurel\'s description of Draco in his sexy black suit. Sigh...

Favorite Line: \"He gave her a wide sexy smile, she suspected that was the only kind of smile he had...\" I read that line over and over; it was beautifully done!

Thanks for clearing up my confusion about Laurel\'s family! I\'m glad I wasn\'t the only one asking questions!

And in regards to your note at the beginning of this chapter, Lorett, I am SO glad you did not scrap your stories! I love your writing and I look forward to each new chapter. I can\'t tell you how much it makes my day when I see a new email telling me you have posted another chapter (or 2, or 3!) and then I get to read them and get a little \"Reality break.\" You are very loved and very appreciated, honey! *big bear hug*

But...you are also a tease!!! You THOUGHT ABOUT posting a 3-fur, but you didn\'t???!!! How can you torture me like that! If you hadn\'t said anything I would have been perfectly content with my 2-fur. But NO! You had to say that you ALMOST posted the next chapter, too, and now all I can do is obscess over the next chapter and the Laurel/Draco interation that will likely occur! OOOOOOOH! I\'m about to explode! You wicked girl! How could you? *Pouts, pouts, pouts* For heaven\'s sake, post more soon!!! But in the meantime, hugs and smooches to you!

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ok ok ok breath in breath out breath iiii......... HAAHAHAHAHA ok ok ok ok ok ok ok ok ok ok ok *breaths in hevily* i forgot what i was gonna say...... hmmmmmmmmmmm....... wait WAIT! i think its coming back to me.................................................................... nope i got nothin. haha whenever i talk about my bf or my best friend i pernonce it bif. hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha hey whenever i type my h\'s it looks like a CAPITAL h HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! ok ill stop now. omg im sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo disapointed in my friend tsk tsk tsk. once again she left me ALL of the work for the progect we\'re working on *pouts* she does this to me EVERY time! grrrrrrrr i told my bif aboutith itith haha i thoughtith itith wouldith beith coolith ifith iith putith ithsith afterith everyith wordith! arentith iith smartith?!?!?!?!?!?!? ok seriously. i am THE stupitest person EVER. omg yesterday i was like i am smart with a capital T even though theres no t in smarT. my friends like you\'re joking right? and i thought REALLY hard and then i realized that there WAS a t in smarT hahahahahahahahahaha! i felt so stupid. i was about to DIE of laufter. hey. thats a cool way to spell laughter. lafter. hahahahahahahahahahahaha! omg im laughing like myself aka a maniac again HAHAHAHAHAHAHA STOP LAUGHING HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA NO!

Whew, darling. That was quite a response. I don\'t think that was a 1/4 page...it was closer to TEN PAGES. You could publish it and call it a novel and make millions. (Well...I\"d buy it....) Now I\'m going to have to do my best to make a really, really, really long review....but it\'s almost my bedtime, so I dunno how long it will actually be. Guess there\'s no way to know buy find out, huh? Yeah, Alison, that means get your ass in gear.

Hm. These last couple of chapters were so ... fluff-like. Well, not fluff-like. That\'s the wrong word. But lighter, more fun - the party right before everything goes wrong and the lightning flashes and all the little boy and girls are scared inside by the thunder. That kind of thing. Very foreshadowed (not that I can think of any examples. It just seemed sort of foreboding - in a really fun way). God, don\'t I wish that I could just show up in Spells looking absolutely gorgeous (I\'m brunette, so at least I\'m his type) in a beautiful black, hip-hugging dress and just yank my Draco away. And then he could just look sexily at me and kiss MY hand and send shivers up my spine.....ooh. Wow. I could feel \'em, right there.

I completely got the final note you put at the end of chappie 19 - the one about how Harry and Draco are teenagers and don\'t want to focus on impending doom. I mean, who would? They\'re at a bar with gorgeous women around them (including me...and you!!) and it seems like they have their whole life ahead of them. What\'s that word \"tomorrow\" mean anyways? It\'s like a song in RENT (musical....I ADORE IT....so amazingly awesome) says: \"Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other road, no other way, no day but today.\" Well, it sort of applies. Except for the regret part. Basically, what I\'m TRYING to say, is that they\'re simply living. And you can\'t live by thinking constantly about tomorrow. It\'s too grim. It\'s something that I think Hermione has problems with - and I do, too, for that matter - just letting go and thinking of nothing but that single moment. Impulse is the weapon of the youth; adults often think too much about what they\'re GOING to do, what they need to do. What happened to acting in the moment? I\'m a big fan of the stage - I do a little acting - and it was only recently brought home to me what a reliable tool instinct is. The choices you feel are right usually are; if they\'re not, then at least you would have acted on your own judgements and morals. It\'s entirely your mistake, without the overlay of peer pressure and others\' values.

Wow, okay. Didn\'t mean to get psychological on you. (You should read my journals...they\'re full of that kind of thoughtful crap. Poetic, of course. Analogies and metaphors and all those glorious literary tools in the English language. It\'s what I love about writing...the freedom within structure. Structure being grammar.) Gee, I did it AGAIN! Must have been something in what I ate. Let\'s see...I simply loved the whole contest of wills and boldness between Laurel and Draco. I completely thought it was appropriate to have both views - I mean, from Laurel\'s actions in the first half as told by Draco, you get the gist (did I spell that right?) of what she wants, but it\'s nice to know that she recognizes him from her vision/nightmare. And, ironically, have already labeled him as HERS. I found that very amusing, actually. They both stake each other out, but one does it waayy more bluntly than the other (is that the American culture I see there? or simply the old-fashioned, gentlemanly way Draco was brought up?). Oh shoot, as promised, I DO have to go upstairs dearie, cutting me off mid-thought. I\'ll wrap up the last point really fast: I thought that you captured the connection between the two - fated or otherwise - perfectly. Definitely could feel the attraction, the desire, the simple CURIOSITY so completely. It was brilliant. And of course, I am most eager to see how this...er....tension develops in the next chappie. HURRY UP AND UPDATE ALREADY!! Or I\'ll have to take more than my fair share of Draco!!!! (Don\'t make me....)

~Alison

P.S. Oh, would ya mind adding me to the list for It Had to Be You?? I think I mentioned it before, but I don\'t mind reminding you a bit.
P.P.S. Er...I have this nagging feeling I wrote this second post-script for a reason. I just have to think of what it was..... OH YEAH! I would LOVE to have IM chats w/ you!!! You have AIM? My sn is Owl5327 (just like my email), but I must warn you that I\'m rarely on. Well, if you count rarely as being on only two or three times a week. In any case, just leave your sn, and I will keep my eyes PEELED for you. Or vice versa. If all else fails, there\'s always email!!!! Discussion of hotties Harry and Draco, here we come!

whoo! im here! im here! hope you didnt forget about me! sorry for my absence, but it took me a while to get caught up with the re-reads. and for some reason my computer (that may as well be a rock with a hole in it) wouldnt load chapter 18 AT ALL!! it was driving me nuts! so now that you\'ve uploaded 19 and 20, i decided to just skip it. sorry about all the ff.net crap; a lot of people have a prolem with that site, but theres really no where else to go. i mean theres always mediaminer, but that site is just sooooo confusing...i hate going there. the ff.net set up is just so nice. AFF, well, its not my favorite cuz its basically only dedicated to nc-17 stuff, but i support your decision just to stay here. at least you know you wont get booted.

hope things are going well for you! cheers!
-Wilby :)

Mmh...
I\'m undecided.
First, I didn\'t like that you mixed \"Harry\'s death plan\" information with \"Draco meeting Laurel\" information, but as you explained at the end in your A/N, it does make sense. He\'s a teenager, and if Harry won\'t take his own death seriously... why should Draco?
I\'m worried however, at what will happen with Draco being totally distracted by Laurel and Harry and Ron just not paying any attention.
Draco\'s recommendation sticks out in my head, however. They should warn Ron\'s family. Will they? Will they believe the warning? Will anything happen in the Burrow?

Helloo.
I liked it a lot better in Laurel\'s perspective, maybe because it was not confused with anything else.
And I love she\'s got an advantage over him: she KNOWS who he is. Not completely, but she knows where she has seen him before. And to me, that\'s and advantage.
I also think that even though everything was centered on Draco, you gave the characters around Laurel a lot more life than you gave those around Draco (in Draco\'s chapter). This one seemed more alive, more real. Again, maybe it\'s because Draco\'s chapter was dealing with two plot points, and this one is focused in only one.
Laurel seemed to me more the shy type and wow! she\'s not. I\'ll love to see her interact with the Hogwarts students. She will, right? They\'re just so different, but I think it\'ll be like fresh air. Wonder what her best subject will be? Will she like Trelawney? JIJIJIJIJI. Todavia no salen del antro siquiera y yo ya quiero saber hasta sus calificaciones.....! Any ways, great chapters.... Pity you didn\'t post 3. But, such is life, I guess. =)

omg wowzer, narcious is a firecraker! LOL or so i might say. wonderful job *yawn* sorry this taint such a good review as normal. I\'m having a bad weekend, plus I\'m sick o.o. well toodles!!!
~Krysta, the lynster

Hello! Just dropping a quick note here! lol

I had forgot about this chapter, but it\'s good to read it again. I like how you called Draco \"Harry\'s secret weapon\" here

Ok, OFF to read chappie 17! *grin*