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April 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow... another great chapter... i really enjoyed that one, particularly the dynamics b/w harry and ron. i like fact that harry is wary over ron\'s possessiveness of hermione! i hope you can work with this and draw it out to an interesting and exciting conclusion! although i\'m not a big fan of ginny, i must admit you certainly livened her up! i can\'t wait for you to bring hermione into the picture, and i hope you make her as spectacular sounding as everyone else does in this fic :) thanks again for the great chapter, and i\'m going to check out \"you\", although i\'m not quite sure where to find it. i\'ll google it and let you know how it goes.
nnt :)
nnt :)
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April 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
scratch my last comment! i found \"you\" (i assume its the story \"it had to be you\" which is listed alongside this one on your author page :)
its a good one, though i must admit, i enjoy dark, tension-filled draco/hermione stories a little bit more than i do the fluff. still, i
thoroughly enjoyed your fic, and i hope you write more :)
nnt
its a good one, though i must admit, i enjoy dark, tension-filled draco/hermione stories a little bit more than i do the fluff. still, i
thoroughly enjoyed your fic, and i hope you write more :)
nnt
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April 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i loved it, i always dooooooooooooooooooooooooooo. lol i just woke up some yea im acting weird.............. lol yepyep you\'re great *muah*
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April 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whew! Chapter 29 was a great ride! I\'m going to need to brush up on my geometry with all these love quadrangles and hexagons and such going on. That Maggie is a brave woman, inviting teenagers into her home. Especially ones as gorgeous and hormonal as all these guys and girls are. She strikes me as someone very up to the challenge, though.
I loved Harry\'s reaction to the news that Arthur wanted to speak to him. The Weasleys may not be his legal guardians, but their parental influence on him is strong, and I think deep down Harry fears disappointing them.
Ah, Ginny. So much potential in her character. I can NOT wait to see where you take her. I already like the way you write her, the little minx. Are you going to turn me into a Harry/Ginny shipper? Quite likely, I\'d say. And the Ginny/Ron sibling interaction was GREAT! That Ginny, tortures her brother, and enjoys it. I know what it\'s like to be the youngest and only girl. I have a special place in my heart for Gin. I love how she handled Harry and calmed him down, too.
The Harry/Ron interaction was brilliant all the way through. From the top of the lungs fight, to the silent communication, all of it. I could not get enough! You conveyed the connection between them so well. So well written. Yum.
And speaking of yum, you went and did it. Ron just became an official hottie and contender for my Harry and Draco affections with your description of him through Laurel\'s eyes. \"she just thought he looked so very handsome when he was so angry like this. Dangerous and sexy, with those deep, intense blue eyes challenging and sparkling like cobalt jewels, muscles rippling, taut against his fair skin as he stood, balling and flexing his hands and taking shallow breaths, attempting to calm himself.\" Sign me up for the muscle-rippling, dangerously sexy, cobalt blue-eyed red-head fan club, like right now, please. Damn, Lorett. You KNOW I have a rather unhealthy fantasy world with the sexy Draco and sexy Harry you write, and now...well now...I\'ve entered a new level in The Gutter, I\'m afraid. 3 incredibly HOT teenaged boys roaming around in my head...this cannot be legal...
Laurel, you\'d best watch that flip-flopping pitter-patting heart of yours \'cause your hormones are out to cause trouble!
Nice little reveal with the OotP stuff, and about Ron & Hermione\'s relationship plus Harry\'s ambiguity about it.
And *shrieks with delight* Draco at the end. And Ginny?! And he\'d know that voice anywhere?! Draco, my dear, you\'ve got some \'splainin to do!!! Excellent place to leave off. Well, except that I DESPERATELY want more.
Okay, so let\'s see, what do we have so far...Harry likes Laurel but is also attracted to Ginny and apparently harbors subconscious feelings for Hermione; Laurel likes Draco but is also attracted to Harry and Ron; Draco wants Laurel, but most likely had something going on with Ginny at some point in the past; Ginny once had a crush on Harry, probably had a fling of some kind with Draco, and now likes Harry again; Ron likes Hermione but is secretive about it with Harry; and Hermione may have feelings for Harry... Have I got it so far? So that makes this story a love octogon perhaps? Ah, what a tangled web of teenaged angst you weave, Lorett.
Damn! You found my hiding place behind your monitor. Rats...*goes off to sulk and find another nook in your office to lurk in*
Well, Simpatico-girl, yet another helping of wonderfulness that you have dished up here. I cannot rave enough about it! *hugs you tight* Thanks!
I loved Harry\'s reaction to the news that Arthur wanted to speak to him. The Weasleys may not be his legal guardians, but their parental influence on him is strong, and I think deep down Harry fears disappointing them.
Ah, Ginny. So much potential in her character. I can NOT wait to see where you take her. I already like the way you write her, the little minx. Are you going to turn me into a Harry/Ginny shipper? Quite likely, I\'d say. And the Ginny/Ron sibling interaction was GREAT! That Ginny, tortures her brother, and enjoys it. I know what it\'s like to be the youngest and only girl. I have a special place in my heart for Gin. I love how she handled Harry and calmed him down, too.
The Harry/Ron interaction was brilliant all the way through. From the top of the lungs fight, to the silent communication, all of it. I could not get enough! You conveyed the connection between them so well. So well written. Yum.
And speaking of yum, you went and did it. Ron just became an official hottie and contender for my Harry and Draco affections with your description of him through Laurel\'s eyes. \"she just thought he looked so very handsome when he was so angry like this. Dangerous and sexy, with those deep, intense blue eyes challenging and sparkling like cobalt jewels, muscles rippling, taut against his fair skin as he stood, balling and flexing his hands and taking shallow breaths, attempting to calm himself.\" Sign me up for the muscle-rippling, dangerously sexy, cobalt blue-eyed red-head fan club, like right now, please. Damn, Lorett. You KNOW I have a rather unhealthy fantasy world with the sexy Draco and sexy Harry you write, and now...well now...I\'ve entered a new level in The Gutter, I\'m afraid. 3 incredibly HOT teenaged boys roaming around in my head...this cannot be legal...
Laurel, you\'d best watch that flip-flopping pitter-patting heart of yours \'cause your hormones are out to cause trouble!
Nice little reveal with the OotP stuff, and about Ron & Hermione\'s relationship plus Harry\'s ambiguity about it.
And *shrieks with delight* Draco at the end. And Ginny?! And he\'d know that voice anywhere?! Draco, my dear, you\'ve got some \'splainin to do!!! Excellent place to leave off. Well, except that I DESPERATELY want more.
Okay, so let\'s see, what do we have so far...Harry likes Laurel but is also attracted to Ginny and apparently harbors subconscious feelings for Hermione; Laurel likes Draco but is also attracted to Harry and Ron; Draco wants Laurel, but most likely had something going on with Ginny at some point in the past; Ginny once had a crush on Harry, probably had a fling of some kind with Draco, and now likes Harry again; Ron likes Hermione but is secretive about it with Harry; and Hermione may have feelings for Harry... Have I got it so far? So that makes this story a love octogon perhaps? Ah, what a tangled web of teenaged angst you weave, Lorett.
Damn! You found my hiding place behind your monitor. Rats...*goes off to sulk and find another nook in your office to lurk in*
Well, Simpatico-girl, yet another helping of wonderfulness that you have dished up here. I cannot rave enough about it! *hugs you tight* Thanks!
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April 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love that last line of the last chapter. You are really good at letting people use their over active imaginations. Did Draco and Ginny have something, or is it our imaginations ? When Hermione gets there, will Laurel have more competion ?Did Draco have Hermione too ? You are evil, but I love it .
(Draco froze; his pulse quickening and his eyes opening wide for a minute, before regaining his composure and turning around deliberately slow. He knew that voice
(Draco froze; his pulse quickening and his eyes opening wide for a minute, before regaining his composure and turning around deliberately slow. He knew that voice
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April 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Draco running his fingertips across his scar in that absent-minded manner was pretty hot. The asides (he\'s always hot) are getting over the top.
Harry thinking \"Hey, I almost got killed too!\" was funny. How Harry. Canon Harry, that is.
Harry thinking \"Hey, I almost got killed too!\" was funny. How Harry. Canon Harry, that is.
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April 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(CHAP 28)
Yay!! I\'m back, as promised. About time, enh?? And this was such a BRILLIANT chapter...I can\'t believe I missed it. Oh well. I\'m making up for it now, right? Right. Okay, I\'ll try to keep the review short and compact, seeing as I just sent you a novel for an email two seconds ago. Not to mention that I have another review coming up.
Lots of things here. The thing that I noticed first - and really appreciated - was Draco\'s reaction to his memories as he woke up. How, as he was reflecting on the deaths and the pain and the events of the previous evening, he felt guilt settle in. How he, like Harry and Laurel before him, felt that it was HIS fault. It\'s funny how death seems to do that to you, how it brings all the insecurities and darkness to the surface. Even though it really shouldn\'t be like that - it should be a clean ending, a point where one life stops and others carry on - human nature forces us to remember everything that is terrible about us and places it on the graves of the deceased. It\'s sad to be honest; it makes grief so much harder to bear.
But not for Draco, I see. I mean, he has that guilt and shame, but he turns it into anger for the Death Eaters - people he knew under their masks - and for his father. Bastard. A sexy one, but still a bastard. I knew it. I KNEW IT WAS HIM!! But that reminds me of another thing you told me when I mentioned that Draco\'s almost-murderer might be Lucius (and that it meant Draco was exposed to the Death Eaters, as you pointed out this chapter), was that he could probably identify each and every Death Eater by their voices. Doesn\'t that mean that he probably knows who tried to kill him? I mean, the way you wrote this chapter, he still seemed oblivious, but you never know. I did something similar with Pansy, to hide Hermione\'s identity in PUPPET MASTER (I used Pansy\'s name instead of Hermione\'s...that kind of thing. Not exposing the full truth, covering it with half-lies). And come on, Draco\'s lived with the man for SEVENTEEN YEARS! He\'s got to have recognized Lucius\' walk and his words and his wand and the shape of his shoulders. I can identify my dad in a crowd of about one hundred people. I can always pick him out by the way he walks; it\'s nothing special, but just HIM.
Hm, a line I really loved: \"His life as he
Yay!! I\'m back, as promised. About time, enh?? And this was such a BRILLIANT chapter...I can\'t believe I missed it. Oh well. I\'m making up for it now, right? Right. Okay, I\'ll try to keep the review short and compact, seeing as I just sent you a novel for an email two seconds ago. Not to mention that I have another review coming up.
Lots of things here. The thing that I noticed first - and really appreciated - was Draco\'s reaction to his memories as he woke up. How, as he was reflecting on the deaths and the pain and the events of the previous evening, he felt guilt settle in. How he, like Harry and Laurel before him, felt that it was HIS fault. It\'s funny how death seems to do that to you, how it brings all the insecurities and darkness to the surface. Even though it really shouldn\'t be like that - it should be a clean ending, a point where one life stops and others carry on - human nature forces us to remember everything that is terrible about us and places it on the graves of the deceased. It\'s sad to be honest; it makes grief so much harder to bear.
But not for Draco, I see. I mean, he has that guilt and shame, but he turns it into anger for the Death Eaters - people he knew under their masks - and for his father. Bastard. A sexy one, but still a bastard. I knew it. I KNEW IT WAS HIM!! But that reminds me of another thing you told me when I mentioned that Draco\'s almost-murderer might be Lucius (and that it meant Draco was exposed to the Death Eaters, as you pointed out this chapter), was that he could probably identify each and every Death Eater by their voices. Doesn\'t that mean that he probably knows who tried to kill him? I mean, the way you wrote this chapter, he still seemed oblivious, but you never know. I did something similar with Pansy, to hide Hermione\'s identity in PUPPET MASTER (I used Pansy\'s name instead of Hermione\'s...that kind of thing. Not exposing the full truth, covering it with half-lies). And come on, Draco\'s lived with the man for SEVENTEEN YEARS! He\'s got to have recognized Lucius\' walk and his words and his wand and the shape of his shoulders. I can identify my dad in a crowd of about one hundred people. I can always pick him out by the way he walks; it\'s nothing special, but just HIM.
Hm, a line I really loved: \"His life as he
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April 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay. I\'m just going to drop a line really fast...I\'ve got to go watch a movie with the family. GAHH!! DO I HAVE NO PEACE!! But know that I\'ve read the chapter and I\'ll be back tomorrow to do the actual review. Forgive me!! I\'ll ramble all you want on the love hexagons in a bit.
~Me.
~Me.
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April 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ooooo!!! The introduction of Ginny was great! Laurel and her seem really similar, they like most guys and most guys like them. And that last part with Draco, I cannot wait to find out what that\'s all about! Sorry but this has to be a short review cos I gotta go out. Just know that the last two chapters were spectacular and so thrilling to read!
xx princessgreta xx
xx princessgreta xx
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April 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yayayayayay!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *muah* i <3 your Draco too lol. and your story. andandandandand yea. update sooooooooooon. *muah*
.tiar.
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