schedule
February 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You\'ve got tbe fucking kidding here. Why don\'t you spare us all and take this shit down, okay?
schedule
February 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ow! That sound promising but can you make it a little bit longer?
Anyway good job.
Angel L.
Anyway good job.
Angel L.
schedule
February 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Line breaks would be nice along with chapters that are more than a couple of paragraphs of dialogue.
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schedule
February 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I would suggest first off writing more than 50 words and calling that a chapter. Secondly, I would suggest reading up on writing short stories. Your formatting is running everything together. Each separate idea, including dialogue, needs to be a separate paragraph. Thirdly, you seriously need a Beta. And finally, I would suggest reading fan fiction which would teach you a lot about the first three items.
schedule
February 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
what absolute crap!
schedule
February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WTF? This is garbage. My author\'s notes are longer and more grammatically correct than this tripe.
schedule
February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Perhaps you should post when you have more than two paragraphs. You can\'t expect anyone to form an interest in this from two paragraphs.
schedule
February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you must be kidding. Get a beta. Or something...
schedule
February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Make it LONGER!!!!!!! good start but needs more length
schedule
February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Your summary is better written than this steaming pile of shite. Don\'t yank us about with this bloody garbage. You\'ve no sentence structure, no real clear grasp of the English language, and apparently no fucking story. This is SHITE. Actually get a couple of pages going AND get it beta\'d before posting. You\'re wasting bandwith, you fucking wanker.