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May 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I pity you for wasting your time writing this garbage.
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June 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This story was promising but ended up going nowhere. It's like there was a hiatus at some point and then the author just couldn't be bothered keeping up, or maybe someone else took it from there and went somewhere else completely.
So that's the end? Malfoy apologizes, Granger dumps his sorry ass and ends up with a doormat and they all dance happily while wearing pretty dresses?
What happened to D/H conflicted feelings? Why was Malfoy so angsty that saturday? He was so afraid the others would find out, well how did they react? Was Pansy happy about it? How were the holidays at Malfoy Manor, the merry bunch of them decorated the tree and made cookies? Are Voldy and the Death Eaters even still in the picture? What was Snape all about being all mysterious about the unexpected couple?
It's OK to leave a story unfinished, seriously. It's too bad because it was not badly written either, until Hermione hexed Draco out of the blue, leaving the reader as frustrated as she was after the first blowjob in the library.
So that's the end? Malfoy apologizes, Granger dumps his sorry ass and ends up with a doormat and they all dance happily while wearing pretty dresses?
What happened to D/H conflicted feelings? Why was Malfoy so angsty that saturday? He was so afraid the others would find out, well how did they react? Was Pansy happy about it? How were the holidays at Malfoy Manor, the merry bunch of them decorated the tree and made cookies? Are Voldy and the Death Eaters even still in the picture? What was Snape all about being all mysterious about the unexpected couple?
It's OK to leave a story unfinished, seriously. It's too bad because it was not badly written either, until Hermione hexed Draco out of the blue, leaving the reader as frustrated as she was after the first blowjob in the library.
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November 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
great story, feel so bad for ron, the girl he loves hermoine is sleeping with the person he hate the most, then she moving on to justin. and women wounder why good guy turn into jerks.
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June 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I LIKED IT. IT WASN'T AS GOOD AS I THOUGHT IT WOULD BE, BUT I LOVED HOW IT ENDED WITH DRACO AND HERMIONE.
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November 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
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September 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Interesting! Thank you.
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November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow, this is a very well written fic. iv really enjoyed reading it. i think youve dun a fantastic job for the conclusion of the story. i actually wouldnt mind a sequel, so if u feel lik makin 1, go for it. great job, hope you do just as well in ur future fics.
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August 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well I pretty much enjoyed it, although I have some concrit. I thought the first half was really good, but once you got past the sex and focused on the characters, some weaknesses showed through.
I think the whole fic suffered for a lack of Draco\'s POV, particularly since you dropped a lot of hints in the first half to indicate that he was struggling with feelings of some kind. I thought the switch from Hermione being captivated by Draco to being interested in Justin was awkwardly done (I\'m not just saying that because I\'m a D/Hr shipper), and I thought the ending was very out of place compared with the rest of the fic. The rape wasn\'t specifically out of place, but the way it was resolved *was* IMO, particularly how Hermione calmly accepted Draco\'s apology when throughout the story she had been suspicious of them.
I also thought it was out of place for Draco to apologise at all, and that\'s where IMO the lack of Draco\'s POV made the story much weaker. We never found out why he did it, or why he was sorry (after being pretty much unrepenant up to then). I thought the paragraphs about \'they would never love each other\' (paraphrasing sorry, too lazy to find it) was preachy and an easy \'out\' for you as the author, rather than taking the time and effort to resolve it in character.
IMO if your muse was prodding you to make it a Hermione/Justin story you should have just done so, because I don\'t think D/Hr shippers will find your actual resolution to the story any more satisfying than one that ended with Hermione and Justin together. It had the feeling of just drifting away rather than being resolved.
I think the whole fic suffered for a lack of Draco\'s POV, particularly since you dropped a lot of hints in the first half to indicate that he was struggling with feelings of some kind. I thought the switch from Hermione being captivated by Draco to being interested in Justin was awkwardly done (I\'m not just saying that because I\'m a D/Hr shipper), and I thought the ending was very out of place compared with the rest of the fic. The rape wasn\'t specifically out of place, but the way it was resolved *was* IMO, particularly how Hermione calmly accepted Draco\'s apology when throughout the story she had been suspicious of them.
I also thought it was out of place for Draco to apologise at all, and that\'s where IMO the lack of Draco\'s POV made the story much weaker. We never found out why he did it, or why he was sorry (after being pretty much unrepenant up to then). I thought the paragraphs about \'they would never love each other\' (paraphrasing sorry, too lazy to find it) was preachy and an easy \'out\' for you as the author, rather than taking the time and effort to resolve it in character.
IMO if your muse was prodding you to make it a Hermione/Justin story you should have just done so, because I don\'t think D/Hr shippers will find your actual resolution to the story any more satisfying than one that ended with Hermione and Justin together. It had the feeling of just drifting away rather than being resolved.
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May 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great story! I wasn\'t very convinced by the passge in ch. 6 in which Hermione first accepts to
start something with Draco, but I loved it in general. One of my favourites is when Draco
finally gets Hermionie in \"Tequila\". The whole chapter was exhilarating, and the last two
paragraphs REALLY turned me on. The way the ending is solved is very good. It\'s nice to
find Hermionie ending up with Justin, who looks far more mature than her other friends.
You were extremely kind to Draco. I can\'t imagine canon Draco recognizing his own mistakes,
much less with Hermionie, even if he actually felt something like love for her. Also, it
would have been nice if Ron had ended with someone, but such is life, he can\'t always
get what he wants.
start something with Draco, but I loved it in general. One of my favourites is when Draco
finally gets Hermionie in \"Tequila\". The whole chapter was exhilarating, and the last two
paragraphs REALLY turned me on. The way the ending is solved is very good. It\'s nice to
find Hermionie ending up with Justin, who looks far more mature than her other friends.
You were extremely kind to Draco. I can\'t imagine canon Draco recognizing his own mistakes,
much less with Hermionie, even if he actually felt something like love for her. Also, it
would have been nice if Ron had ended with someone, but such is life, he can\'t always
get what he wants.
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May 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
thats was hilarious