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March 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ok... want. more.
want more now.
:)
You have a really intersting concept and do a good job of organizing it scene by scene. You have some tempo problems, some scenes move rather slowly. And your prose needs more development. Otherwise, that was really very good and I\'m extremely.... what\'s the word? excited for the next chapter.
want more now.
:)
You have a really intersting concept and do a good job of organizing it scene by scene. You have some tempo problems, some scenes move rather slowly. And your prose needs more development. Otherwise, that was really very good and I\'m extremely.... what\'s the word? excited for the next chapter.
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March 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh no - I can\'t wait to find out what Hermione says to Severus next. This is a fantastic story - please update soon. There are a lot of interesting ideas here - the brothel, especially.
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March 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i hate. You and your damn cliffiesQ!!!
write more now or i will review everyday until youo do that is a promise not a threat!!!!
write more now or i will review everyday until youo do that is a promise not a threat!!!!
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March 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG What greeat story and what an awful cliffhanger!
I can\'t wait to see how THAT turns out.
I can\'t wait to see how THAT turns out.
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March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please please please update soon!
It certainly is a cliffhanger!
I\'m getting so anxious for them to find each other out, and I\'m actually glad that you\'re dragging it out. It makes it much more interesting :)
It certainly is a cliffhanger!
I\'m getting so anxious for them to find each other out, and I\'m actually glad that you\'re dragging it out. It makes it much more interesting :)
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March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Just read from the beginning through to chapter ten, and I am so hooked. I am looking forward to the next chapter. Well done Brilliant writting.
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March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Dear God, please, please write the next chapter soon. I know you must have been grinning ear-to-ear as you wrote those last lines. I was, certainly, as I read them!
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March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I hate cliffhangers, but I love your story. Please update soon
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March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ohh now she know
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March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yay, let poor mira go to grimmauld place! oh god, you don\'t plan any mira/voldemort, do you?