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I just found this story and have read it all to date. Very well written! The descriptions and emotion between SS and HG are almost palpable. I think the pacing is excellent - they didn\'t fall into bed too quickly, and I love the way you\'ve portrayed the darker side of Dumbledore. Not very many people seem to do that, and I think it\'s nice to see that he isn\'t all lemon drops and pats on the head. He\'s a very powerful wizard who is used to having his orders followed and doesn\'t like it when things do not go according to his plans. Anyway, keep up the good job, and I\'m very much looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Nice cover for what was interupted by Ron, Harry and Molly at Grimald Place. I am enjoying reading about this love that happens before the war is over. Most of the romances between the two happen after the war, or have something to do with her getting some uncommon magic. This is nice and simple. They fell in love and no one and nothing is going to keep them apart. It is also nice to see that Minerva is on their side, even if Albus is not. There were a few gramatical errors, but nothing terribly outrageous. I will be watching for the next chapter with baited breath.

I have read both versions of this story. The one on this site as well as the one on FanFiction. In that I am an adult with a very healthy sex drive, I enjoyed this version of the story. It was strong and vivid, but not over the top. Being a woman who enjoys romance as much as I do, both versions touched my greatly. The none explicit version on FanFiction had just enough sexual connotation to it to be seductive, as well as being able to express the tension that I have always felt would exist between these two characters if they were given a chance. They were really meant for each other, whether that was the intention of J.K. or not. It is the way that she wrote the characters, and althought she has not delved into the psychological make-up of Severus, I have often felt that he, like Harry has been taken advantage of by Dumbledore. I am glad you did not listen to whatever demons that told you that this story could never work. It has worked and I look forward to reading any additional chapters that you may add to it. Trust in your instincts and they will not lead you astray.

looks like you will be seeing my reviews here instead of on FFN. This chapter is romantic and funny, I like the enderaments you have them say in private.

You are doing a fantastic job with this story. I can\'t wait to read the next chapter! ^_^

This is an amazing story! I can\'t wait for the next update!

Ok- making me come over to AFF to see the lemons you wrought.

This was a really emotional chapter. I loved it. I really like this story. I love the original plot. Hermione\'s protective magic surrounding Severus was a beautiful image. I really look forward to the next chapter and hope you will be able to updeate soon.

WOW! great chapter! and a great story. I can\'t wait fir the next installment!

I like this story, however, I think that their marriage was a little fast coming. In my opinion, they should have had at least one more chapter to discuss things, draw the tension out. Like this, I had the impression that the only thing you wanted to do was to get them into bed as quickly as possible. Also, the last bit of chapter six was seemingly out of nowhere. Hermione seems very emotionally unstable and immature throughout this story and Severus seems earnestly cowed, which to me is surprising for a confirmed bachelor. This chapter (6) was also incredibly fast paced compared to the earlier chapters, which to me were more thought out and better developed.