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i loved it when severus got into dracos head, it was cool. please update soon

The plot is simply great!
I recomend everyone read this story.

I quite like the fact that Harry\'s having such an easy time of it with Daphne, while Malfoy\'s having a real slog to get even the slightest affection from Hermione. Of course, it serves him right, and Hermione IS the smartest witch of her generation. But it\'s nice to see nonetheless. I think your characterization of Draco is quite good. There\'s not a chance he\'d capitulate easily, especially if he\'s after revenge for his father\'s incarceration. I can hardly wait to see what happens when Dumbledore gets Ministry approval for the potions project. He\'s going to be spinning in circles, and with the \'kill him with kindness\' routine Hermione is putting up, it will be fascinating to watch him spiral out of his pre-fabricated rut.

May I offer a little bit of advice of a technical nature? You might want someone else to read through your chapters before you post them. Spell check doesn\'t correct for words that are spelled correctly but used incorrectly (for example, you\'ve used \'ware\' instead of \'wear\' for wearing clothing, and \'dear\' instead of \'deer\' for the deer running in the forest. In each case, \'ware\' and \'dear\' they\'re correctly spelled words, merely used in the wrong place. Another set of eyes are really helpful in catching these... we all suffer from these types of things.

Hi i see that you also post at ff.net as i do.

good work! keep it up lad/lady!

I think it\'s a lovely story. Stick to your guns girl. Don\'t let the readers push you into a mad dash for sex. What\'s sex without the tension that accompanies it. I\'ll tell you a big let down.

I love this, it\'s really clever. Please update soon

I suggest you make Harry tell DG about the contract.
If you don\'t, you will just end up with a very clich

I\'m very pleased to see that you\'ve made this story about more than just the bet... it\'s a good gambit to connect the Gryffindor/Slytherin pairings, but it has become such a hackneyed device that it\'s very difficult to keep the story fresh. That you\'ve now woven the Cruciatus potion into the storyline gives it some weight, and a depth that the early chapters were lacking. I\'m very much looking forward to where you take the story. [Please forgive the slight criticism, but you might want to give your chapters a final read through to catch the homonyms... there/their/they\'re and your/you\'re.]

I guess you\'re right that they can\'t just jump right into sex, but Harry and Draco are probably really horny right now thinking about whats going to happen. Because of that, I would appreciate it if they wanked off to take care of themselves ;-)