rate_review Reviews

Let\'s see now. You\'ve successfully turned Hermione into an immature, air-headed, little twit. And that\'s just in the first few lines. You have absolutely no respect for the personalities of these characters and no mind for detail. You can\'t even set up a good enough opening to this little abomination. In short, I think you\'re a horribly below-average writer who\'s very likely still in the 9th grade and has no business writing anything remotely sexual (unless you\'ve already put out to the first guy that said you\'re cute). Graduate from high school with at least a 3.7 GPA and high marks in English before you consider writing to spare us (at least those of us that have any real sense, because I\'m guessing that there were a whole bunch of people that told you what a good/excellent/awesome fic this is etc. But guess what? They\'re probably just a bunch of sexually frustrated teenagers that couldn\'t pull a good story out of their asses even if they tried) the pain of this abhorrant piece of shit that you proudly call your fic. I\'ve grown severely tired of coming across Badfic! that I\'m at my breaking point.

Poor Hermione! She is really upset about the whole ordeal. Will she and Draco make-up and have awesome make-up sex? Please say, \"YES!\" *gives sad puppy dog eyes* Please update soon! :)

Please don\'t let it be over.

so sad :0(
i want a happy ending !!!!!!!!1
PLEASE UPDATE SOON

yay. I\'ve been reading this for a while. I really like this story.

* Yelling at the people in the GCR * how could they let that happen ? I hope Draco and Hermione patch things up.

Okay, I figured something like this would happen, but I hope Draco doesn\'t go off and do something stupid like say, \"Well, I never loved you anyway. You\'re just a mudblood bitch that was a good lay. That\'s all!\" and leave her. I know that angst was to come, but you\'ve got to put some fluff because too much angst can be draining. Please continue! :)

An author has two voices; the one they use in their own lives and the other is reserved for their stories. Everyone is different, so should the characters in a story. A writer needs to develop different voices and actions and motives for each central character. I think this is something you should work on because after reading four chapters, everyone seems...the same. Suggestions on how to develop this trait: listen carefully to the dialogue when watching tv, movies - learn to start watching body language - and most obvious, read as much of everything as you can.

Good progress - I would not have reviewed if I thought otherwise.

Queeny what can I say I just like to leave reviews,lol

Actually this is why I stopped by.

It has some to m attention that some of your reviewers are being incredibly bogus and well all I have to say is this:

GIVE THIS STORY A CHANCE. YOU HAVE NO IDEA OF THE EXCITEMENT THAT IS COMING. AND FOR THOSE OF YOU WHO DO ENJOY IT. GOOD KEEP READING IT ONLY GETS BETTER!!!!!!!

ROCK ON QUEENY!1!!!

~SLY~

Nice one for a 12? or 90 year old guy. I am sorry but i hate writing freaking long reviews they tend to boring. I more thing, how old are u. BUT DONT EMAIL ME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Just write it in your next chapter