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October 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Amazing. This is the second story of yours I have read.
You are an excelent writer. I'm extremely envious!
mmm..Snarry...can it get any better?
You even have a plot! (and a good one at that)
Keep up the good work
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You are an excelent writer. I'm extremely envious!
mmm..Snarry...can it get any better?
You even have a plot! (and a good one at that)
Keep up the good work
=^-^=
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October 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
um, I remembered something I should mention
A couple places you refer to Severus looking into Harry's blue eyes and Snape talked about Harry as being a 'brown-haired boy' to his mother.
Harry has green eyes and black hair. You probably don't want to change this in your fic.
Sorry, I know it's kind of picky but...It is HARRY after all
Still loved the story,
=^-^=
A couple places you refer to Severus looking into Harry's blue eyes and Snape talked about Harry as being a 'brown-haired boy' to his mother.
Harry has green eyes and black hair. You probably don't want to change this in your fic.
Sorry, I know it's kind of picky but...It is HARRY after all
Still loved the story,
=^-^=
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September 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Amusing: While wearing a Death Eater robe, Harry kicks Peter with his scruffy old trainer. Nobody seems to notice that wearing that shoe might seem a bit out of character Snape.
Luna blows Draco in the train, but later there's a snide comment about Harry watching Pansy blow Draco.
Where are you from that in all your stories you use the phrase, "while ever?"
Absolutely great storyteller. Absolute crap at spelling. Suggestion: Find a 9 year old kid and ask for his spelling and a copy of a Harry Potter book in June some year. Practice the spelling words a few times and you won't continue to drive your readers up the wall with mistakes the 9 year old wouldn't make.
accept except
draw drawer
evolving involving
apperate Apparate
Lilly Lily
bare bear
Occlumency Legilimency
disbelieve disbelief
burry bury
shitty shirty
their they're
grasped gasped
whether weather
mattered matted
stagnant pause, pregnant pause
snuffled awkwardly around on his feet. [ shuffled]
leant lent
slithering Slytherin
familie's family's
to too
sole mate soulmate
Parceltongue Parseltongue
than then
pensive pensieve
alone along
instants instance
wrap rap
couch cough
off of
chocked choked
loosing losing
wrapt rapt
fruistration frustration
Luna blows Draco in the train, but later there's a snide comment about Harry watching Pansy blow Draco.
Where are you from that in all your stories you use the phrase, "while ever?"
Absolutely great storyteller. Absolute crap at spelling. Suggestion: Find a 9 year old kid and ask for his spelling and a copy of a Harry Potter book in June some year. Practice the spelling words a few times and you won't continue to drive your readers up the wall with mistakes the 9 year old wouldn't make.
accept except
draw drawer
evolving involving
apperate Apparate
Lilly Lily
bare bear
Occlumency Legilimency
disbelieve disbelief
burry bury
shitty shirty
their they're
grasped gasped
whether weather
mattered matted
stagnant pause, pregnant pause
snuffled awkwardly around on his feet. [ shuffled]
leant lent
slithering Slytherin
familie's family's
to too
sole mate soulmate
Parceltongue Parseltongue
than then
pensive pensieve
alone along
instants instance
wrap rap
couch cough
off of
chocked choked
loosing losing
wrapt rapt
fruistration frustration
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July 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Teriffic. Definetly in need of a sequel! Please write some more in line with this plot line! Wonderful plot twists and characters.
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Please explain the epiphany that harry has in chapter 27. i don't understand what it is that he realizes.
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February 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
my god i love your stories. i love you!!!!!!!!
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November 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
my goodness! this was a great piece. (criticism time...) there were a few inconsistincies with plot and little pieces here and there. . .but aside from that. . .WOW!
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November 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
there have been precious few fan fictions that have litterally brought me to tears, but this is one of them (chapter 33). amazing job!
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September 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was so funny!!!!!!! Neville running around like that!!!!!!
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August 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I don't think you could write something I wouldn't love. lol. This is one of the best Harry/Snape stories I've ever encountered. I fell totally in love with this story. Thank you for sharing it.