rate_review Reviews

Nicely done. Short, sweet and to the ponit. I like Severus\'s prickliness and Hermione\'s determination. Perhaps you don\'t need to add the part numbers, just connect them with words \"awhile later... three hours later\" etc. Well done.

This was a good one-shot! I liked how you tried to capture both of their view points. I\'m very greatful for the hopeful ending!

Wonderful! One of the best Marriage Law Challenge fics I\'ve read.
Thank you for making Hermione an adult and for showing their burgeoning relationship in such a delightful way.

That was a nice take on the marriage law challange. A bit different. It is always nice to see a confident Hermione and having her a bit older and more mature made for a good story. Severus has his snarky bits intact, but you tempered that side of him nicely by throwing in his insecurites. Well done and well rounded...especially for a one-shot. Thank you so much!

i think that you have great talent. but this particular story could be bettar. and if you really wanted to you could probibaly get somthing published.

Wow that was really good.

The idea of the story is actually great but it tends to sound to dry at times. Sometimes I have the same problem when writing, though I have to say I am not brave enough to let another person read my phantasies then, wich might be a pitty because as I said the idea of your story is great and a great deal different from what the others made out of the \"Marriage Law\". I found that this dryness allways appears when I am trying to hard to explain what every single person feels. Sometimes it is just important to leave some emotions to the person reading and a long story does not necessarily mean to be a good one. Though, I have to repeat that, not that you get me wrong, this story has great potential - if it would have been slightly different formulated.

Keep going

Nic

i loved the story so far it sounds like it will be a great one iespecially love the part were the almighty potions professor was being so shy i cant wait to read more

I like it. I love all of the marriage law challenges, but this one was unique in that you said everything that neede to be said in such a short amount of space...and still had plot. Good work!

awwwwwwwww.... such a sweet ending!! it started off a little awkward but it worked out very well for severus and hermione. :) any more or was that the end of it?

@--->--->--->--- ~*Florentia*~