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January 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I rarely review on this website, but I felt like I should throw my two cents in because I REALLY love this fic and you deserve all the praise you can get. You would not believe how much of an obsession reading this has been. The lack of sleep, the procrastination of schoolwork.
When I realized how long this was when I got to around chapter 15 I was actually relieved. This has everything I love in a fic and I NEVER want it to end!! Okay well maybe not never, just feel free to take as long getting there as you want. Which you seem to be doing anyway. :) Also the greater length allows you to more fully develop your different plot points rather than just jumping around to the more "important" scenes.
Anyway, as I was saying, I love everything about your story. Draco and Hermione's interactions are always amusing and your sex scenes are simultaneously hot and sweet. I think that's got a lot to do with the depth of Draco's feelings and I'm really enjoying your portrayal that. I also applaud you on your creativity for doing so many sex scenes effectively without it becoming boring or repetitive. You have a gift.
I also really like your use of secondary characters like Crabe and Goyle and especially Dumbledore and Snape. I love me some meddling Dumbledore. I can't wait to see where you take this! So consider this just a little reminder of how much people love your fic and want to see it updated. :)
When I realized how long this was when I got to around chapter 15 I was actually relieved. This has everything I love in a fic and I NEVER want it to end!! Okay well maybe not never, just feel free to take as long getting there as you want. Which you seem to be doing anyway. :) Also the greater length allows you to more fully develop your different plot points rather than just jumping around to the more "important" scenes.
Anyway, as I was saying, I love everything about your story. Draco and Hermione's interactions are always amusing and your sex scenes are simultaneously hot and sweet. I think that's got a lot to do with the depth of Draco's feelings and I'm really enjoying your portrayal that. I also applaud you on your creativity for doing so many sex scenes effectively without it becoming boring or repetitive. You have a gift.
I also really like your use of secondary characters like Crabe and Goyle and especially Dumbledore and Snape. I love me some meddling Dumbledore. I can't wait to see where you take this! So consider this just a little reminder of how much people love your fic and want to see it updated. :)
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January 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Are you continuing this story? Cuz I really like where it's going!!! PLEASE UPDATE IT!!!! i love it :) :P
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January 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
what a cliffhanger! D: Please please do update soon! :( the suspense is killing me :(
i love this story to bits, hopefully you haven't decided to abandon this in this state. this fic is truly one of the D/Hr classics. <3
i love this story to bits, hopefully you haven't decided to abandon this in this state. this fic is truly one of the D/Hr classics. <3
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January 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I've never read a fanfic quite this long but it was really good so I kept on. Please do update. :(
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December 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
You are a wonderful writer. I recently found your story "Pansy's Volcano" and adore it. I find that I am quite obsessed with the story. I read all 55 chapters in a week. I hope you find the time and creative inspiration to write more. It would truly make this avid fan very happy indeed.
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December 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE please!!!
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November 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I hope you update this story soon!!! Do you think you will?
Every time I read it I remember why it's so great!
Can't wait for the next installment!
Every time I read it I remember why it's so great!
Can't wait for the next installment!
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November 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Please, PLEASE update this story! its my favorite!
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October 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OH please update this story!! I don't know how long it's been here, but I really have enjoyed reading it. I want to know how things end up for Hermione and Draco.
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October 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
You have an interesting premise, and a lot of interesting elements in your story. I confess I haven't read all of it, but I feel I should point out some fundamental problems that I perceive thus far. I'll start with what I like most here, though: Pansy. I love the ambiguity of her character. On the one hand, she's scarily obsessive, not especially bright, and deeply prejudiced. However, there's also a vulnerable, victimized part of her that prevents one from just hating her outright. It's not clear exactly what her deepest motives are: money/power or feelings. It's nice to leave us guessing a little about our antihero. So congrats; my one caution would be to carefully reveal more and more about her as you go on (maybe you do later): at the moment (around ch. 16 or so), she's just plotting and scheming all the time, so she risks turning into the cardboard cutout you avoided so well before. Not that she has to give a cliche speech in which she bares everything, just continue to drop hints here and there (and they can be contradictory, too).
Here's where you lose me:
Draco and Hermione's attraction. As a premise in itself, it's fine, but it's not credibly executed: I could never bring myself to suspend disbelief. For Draco to go from hating Hermione to being obsessively attracted to her after one indirect encounter with her is just such a huge stretch. Plus, he just sort of decides that he likes her romantically, too, and he arbitrarily starts to find previously annoying traits adorable. It makes no sense. And what about his whole deal with blood purity, did that just disappear? He suddenly doesn't care anymore? Hermione's case is in a way even more extreme. She makes fun of him and Pansy, and then, without even seeing Draco--she just thinks about him for a few moments--she is suddenly unbearably aroused every time she even thinks of him. Um, ??? This seems like a major plot hole to me. I think it would be much more realistic if, for example, Draco realized then that he was mildly attracted to Hermione, perhaps forgot about the incident for a little while, and then gradually became obsessed, his feelings transforming over time from purely sexual to romantic as well. Hermione, since she didn't experience quite what Draco experienced, could stay uninterested in him for a while before she eventually succumbs as well. I'm not saying this HAS to be the trajectory, or that there's a "correct formula" for this to work, I just think this is one direction you could go that would be much more credible than what you have now.
So, once Draco and Hermione are suddenly and rather inexplicably obsessed with each other, there comes another problem. They are just ALWAYS aroused. I mean, it's not very believable. I know they're supposed to be randy teenagers, but this is just silly: more like a caricature of "the randy teenager" than a portrayal of real human teenagers who have thoughts and feelings aside from their sexual impulses. I understand they're lusting after each other, but surely they have other things going on in their lives, other things occupying their minds from time to time, even when they're in each other's presence? And come to think of it, even Ron is just constantly aroused, and Harry's longest appearance in the story thus far is a sex scene. I mean, my God! There's just no real character development: it's all descriptions of how aroused and obsessed the characters are. How am I supposed to sympathize with them and take them seriously? They're just sexual automatons, constantly in heat and with no self-control. Why don't you explore the moral and personal dilemmas in more depth? Like the blood purity thing, or their respective sides in the war, or something? I mean, those are kind of important.
Anyway, those are my thoughts. I hope they're helpful.
-Diane
Here's where you lose me:
Draco and Hermione's attraction. As a premise in itself, it's fine, but it's not credibly executed: I could never bring myself to suspend disbelief. For Draco to go from hating Hermione to being obsessively attracted to her after one indirect encounter with her is just such a huge stretch. Plus, he just sort of decides that he likes her romantically, too, and he arbitrarily starts to find previously annoying traits adorable. It makes no sense. And what about his whole deal with blood purity, did that just disappear? He suddenly doesn't care anymore? Hermione's case is in a way even more extreme. She makes fun of him and Pansy, and then, without even seeing Draco--she just thinks about him for a few moments--she is suddenly unbearably aroused every time she even thinks of him. Um, ??? This seems like a major plot hole to me. I think it would be much more realistic if, for example, Draco realized then that he was mildly attracted to Hermione, perhaps forgot about the incident for a little while, and then gradually became obsessed, his feelings transforming over time from purely sexual to romantic as well. Hermione, since she didn't experience quite what Draco experienced, could stay uninterested in him for a while before she eventually succumbs as well. I'm not saying this HAS to be the trajectory, or that there's a "correct formula" for this to work, I just think this is one direction you could go that would be much more credible than what you have now.
So, once Draco and Hermione are suddenly and rather inexplicably obsessed with each other, there comes another problem. They are just ALWAYS aroused. I mean, it's not very believable. I know they're supposed to be randy teenagers, but this is just silly: more like a caricature of "the randy teenager" than a portrayal of real human teenagers who have thoughts and feelings aside from their sexual impulses. I understand they're lusting after each other, but surely they have other things going on in their lives, other things occupying their minds from time to time, even when they're in each other's presence? And come to think of it, even Ron is just constantly aroused, and Harry's longest appearance in the story thus far is a sex scene. I mean, my God! There's just no real character development: it's all descriptions of how aroused and obsessed the characters are. How am I supposed to sympathize with them and take them seriously? They're just sexual automatons, constantly in heat and with no self-control. Why don't you explore the moral and personal dilemmas in more depth? Like the blood purity thing, or their respective sides in the war, or something? I mean, those are kind of important.
Anyway, those are my thoughts. I hope they're helpful.
-Diane