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November 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Damn, but you can write! The flow, ideas, waiting til the end to mention it may have been a dream, and the lovers name at the end - perfection. Your story telling abilities are excellent. One or two typos in the first few paragraphs. Also, in the first few paragraphs you use a beautifully expressive word, then in another sentence you may use an ordinary word. With your expressive vocabulary I feel those ordinary words could have been upgraded for more impact. But again - Damn, but you can write! After reading it I feel like I need a cigarette - and I don\'t smoke! If you had left out names you could actually publish this as your own original work, and it would be up to the reader as to whether it is slash or not. It is hot either way. You are one of the most impressive writers I have had the pleasure to have stumbled across on this site. Keep up the good work.
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November 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Second and third chapters are very short, but good. I hope you will keep your promise and give us a happy ending... I can enjoy some very angsty and painful stories if I know they will end well, but I hate \"bad ends\" because they make me depressed. Your dribs of memories are well written. I like your story.
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November 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
All I want to know is, is Harry dead? Or did Severus leave without knowing the truth. This almost made me cry and I\'m about to leave for work. Keep going!
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November 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
only on the second chapter right now, but this is the greatest! So sad :( Death fics are sweet, but I guess if a happy ending is coming then he\'s not really dead, right? Still great!
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November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
If there\'s going to be a happy ending then spit it out, cuz I\'m just slightly traumatised...
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November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh my god,that was one of the most beautiful thing iv read in a long time. totally erotic and just beautiful,cant give it any other description
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November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful!
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November 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awwwwwwwwww! that is so sad and sweet. please update soon. i really want this to have a happy ending.
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like this just as it is! However, it was so good....we need more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Continue this please! *begs* That was wonderful! :-) Five out of five for you. Have some cookies. *offers cookies*