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for A Gryffindor and A Slytherin

by Ashley579

person Hanna Delacour
schedule November 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Good building point with this second chapter.... although I do hope we get a better glimpse at the change in Draco and what exactly happened after the defeat of voldemort. I like it! I can\'t wait for Hermione to arrive at Snape\'s... Very Interesting! Much better spelling and grammar in this chapter. Keep up the good work.
person obsidian
schedule November 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
cool beans dude
seriously, i like the plot you have going, so please keep writing!
great great great great
person Amanda
schedule November 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OK, this is getting interesting. You should still proofread but I really like it. What was that look of concern Draco had??Hmm, I guess I\'m going to find out.
person Hanna Delacour
schedule November 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I really like this beginning... so many great possibilities. Your writing is very good, only a few minor glitches here and there, but nothing to worry over. I do hope you continue with this fic, it has great potential, and I must say this is a beginning that I am not familiar with... so bravo for stumping me, as I am something of a DM/HG fanatic, which is well known to many. Many fics all sound the same, but you really have something here, keep going! I\'ll be waiting!
person EmZ
schedule November 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
its a good start
person UJL321
schedule November 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Good so far! What will happen next? ;-)
person obsidian
schedule November 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
good good good goood
so uh, more?
please
its really good, and i like the way you have started it, its gonna be a great story, so PLEASE write more
person Kim
schedule November 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Lots and lots of spelling mistakes, even characters\' names. It get distracting after awhile. You may wish to get a beta to read the chapters before you post them.
person Amanda
schedule November 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I like the story, but there are a lot of mistakes. Keep updating though, because i would like to see were this goes.