rate_review Reviews

This is a good storyline, only it does need polishing. You switch viewpoints alittle much. Try writing in third person only instead of going back and forth. I would enjoy seeing more from you in this little fic.

elementaldeity

Um...........

ok.........

So what happens next?

e-mail me when another chappy is up mate.

inuyasha_zealot16@yahoo.com

Thanks

good chapter and I can\'t wait to see where you go with this.

i thought that ginny was going to make a play for severus, but i guess she had other plans, although a snape/ginny pairing wouldn\'t be half bad.

I\'m loving this story. Yet another great Hermione/Draco fic for me to get wrapped up into. I always like finding ones I can tag and check for updates and this is definitely one of them. I hope you update soon....especially since the holidays are coming up....GOOD JOB!

I love the chapter after reading through it carefully especially Hermione\'s perceptions of Draco when catching him off guard. You really haven\'t taken any liberties with his character and that is sometimes hard to avoid with d/hr fics. So kudos to you on a job well done and I will anxiously be awaiting your next chapter.

i liked it! woot keeep writing!

Yay, i\'m glad we got more of this. I think it\'s really good. I like how you explained how they became friends. I can\'t wait for them to become more now. Great job.

OK, first of all, let me say the story-line\'s an interesting one, and if developed properly, can be a really good story.

*However* what is stopping this from being a good story is your writing. Your style is a bit stiff and your grammar and spelling need a lot of work. Your verbal tenses don\'t agree - that is, you use both present and past tense in the same sentence, even, and that throws things off so much that it\'s hard to stay with the story. You need to make sure you\'re using the right words - for example, in one sentence, you used \"your\" when it should have been \"you\'re\".

Hopefully you can get a good beta to help you with your writing. If you need one, you can email me.

Interesting plot twist. Curious to see where it goes.