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for Yin and Yang

by SkidRow

person Karena Elizabeth
schedule June 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I am humbled.

That is some hot smut. VERY hot. I like the slutty, I don\'t care if youo know it, I have nothing to be ashamed of attitude Storm has! Got dick? She\'s all over it ;) My only question is this: WHEN WILL YOU UPDATE!?!?!?

Also, a threesome would be welcome ;) And what are her daddy\'s plans?

She\'s great =-)

Thanks
Karena Eilzabeth
person Malictus
schedule June 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Very good story. I always like to read stories about Draco or Slytherins, and this doesn\'t disappoint. Well done and keep up the good work. There\'s man many wierdo stories on this site (and yes, I\'m quite aware of the hypocrisy of some who reads about Harry Potte sex calling anything wierd):)
person anglchic340
schedule June 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This is a great story! Its an excellent idea! I can\'t wait for the next chapter!!
person Tina
schedule June 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Go on, you are doing very well! I love the character of Storm Williams!!!
person Cloey...
schedule June 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Awesome! Your doing a great.. Continue please!! *gives you a cupcake*
person Madison
schedule June 3, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful fic! I love all the sexual tension... great job keep it up!disodison
person Anya
schedule June 3, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Keep going!!! This is good. I wanna be STORM lol
person Gina Virtov
schedule May 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
You must continue! It would be so interesting, funny, and wicked cool to see how the teachers react to Storm. Especially Professor Snape...mwahahaha...and you cant just let the thing with Sirius hang. Even besides all that, shes the Dark Lord\'s daughter there has to be a war/battle of some sort where she makes the rather huge decision of Dark or Light. Than you have all the delicious details that go with that...you can always add tragedy. Make her go insane for a while, make her have some unique and amazing power, whatever you want. It\'ll be great, but in order for that to happen you must CONTINUE!!
One more thing PLEASE LET SEVERUS FUCK HER! *rabid fan girl for Severus Snape and Lucius Malfoy* <3 them I do. The part where Lucius fucked her was excellent, I\'ve re-read it at least a dozen times.
It\'d also be kinda cool and yet somewhat nasty if she tried something with Dumbledore. Not an entire fuck, but try to seduce him or something of the sort to get information maybe (providing she chooses the Dark side)...yea that\'d be kinda cool...yep but still somewhat nasty...sorry *is kinda perverted that way* If you do that try to get one good kiss in there before he pushes her away. I mean, you could go through with an entire fuck, but it\'d be sooo out of character that it would mess up the greatness of your story. Later on you could always have an \"alternate chapter\" and do the entire fuck scene, but not in the actual story. Well then. I\'ll stop bothering you with my insane ramblings lol. Please update, your great. <--it rhymes lol.

Yours,
Gina

P.S. A good sonith ith good lyrics ,that you could put in this story would be Mudshovel by Staind. It would relate if Storm had to make the decision of Dark and Light and she was thinking about everything that has happened and what has been done to her. O hell, I\'ll just post them here for you lol.

Mudshovel by Staind

You take away
I feel the same

You take away
I feel the same
All the promises you made to me you made in vain
I lost myself inside your tainted smile again

Cause you can feel my ANGER
You can feel my pain
You can feel my torment
Driving me insane
I can\'t fight these feelings they will bring you pain
You can\'t take away
Make me whole again

I feel betrayed
Stuck in your ways
And you rip me apart
With the brutal things you say
I can\'t deal with shit anymore
I just look away

Cause you can feel my ANGER
You can feel my pain
You can feel my torment
Driving me insane
I can\'t fight these feelings they bring only pain
You can\'t take away
Make me whole again

Mudshovel

You take away
I feel the same
All these promises
You promised only pain
If you take away
And leave me with nothing again

\'Cause you can feel my ANGER
You can feel my pain
You can feel my torment
Driving me insane
I can\'t fight these feelings they will bring you pain
You can\'t take away
Make me whole again

Youl fel feel my anger
You will feel my pain
You will feel my torment
Driving you insane
I can\'t fight these feelings they will bring you pain
You won\'t take away
I\'ll be whole again

Mudshovel

You obviously dont have to use all of it, only if you want to, but parts of it are good.Perhaps Storm relating to her feelings about her father?. If you want to, listen to the song its wicked.

X_O cya

person Anon
schedule May 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
wonderful work, i really like Storm, she\'s got spunk!
person lasair
schedule May 24, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Please let storm hex pansy and hermione!!!!
Maybe a \" I wanna have an orgy with everyone in slytherin and to remeber\" hex for hermione or a hex that\'d cause her to be fucked by something out of the forest in hagrids class or something along that line. obviously storm\'s gotta have draco,harry and sirius, but who else? ron? snape? dumbledore? minerva?
in case you didn\'t notice I love this story and it has just the right amount of innuendo and sex with a kicking plot as well. Keep up the good work.