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This is on the first chapter. It is an alright beginning just a lot of spelling or typing errors.

Love it please keep writing. So good

Changing ideals - when will you be completing the story. Seems Harry died and the horcrux took over? Poor AD

Hi! I'm loving the story a lot so far!! You have a great idea here and you're executing it wonderfully. The only issue I seem to be finding though is the not so occasionally spelling error, so I was wondering if you are in need of a beta, and if you are I would be more than happy to help you out. Hopefully this thing will show you my email, that way you can get a hold of me. If you're intreseted of course, I don't mean to try and push you into anything. ^^ once again I'd just like to say I really like the story!!!

Well I read the 27 chapters posted. It is an interesting story with heaps of potential. Your story has great intentions. But I must say that the editing leaves something to be desired. Though if this is because there is a coding problem loading the story onto this site my apologies. I liked your Harry character. He had strength even with all the abused heaped upon him throughout his childhood. That he is aware of the evil manipulations of Dumbledore & strives to overcome that "death sentence" makes him more intriguing. Severus is Severus. A conflict in humanity. His loyalty to his house is never challenged, his growing attraction to Harry gives his character a new angle. As the plot hasn't progressed further that their mutual attraction (which they have acted on finally). Though the thought of being able to be that intimate after the horrendous rape & physical assault the prior day does give credence to the fantasy of fiction. Hopefully you intend to complete this story & I look forward to reading further chapters. Thankyou.

please tell me you are planning to kill Blaise and Dean...You can't say they wouldn't deserve it...otherwise, I love this story. Harry's always been a Slytherin, he just decided to agree with the hat now...Nobody deserves that kind of crap to happen to them except rapist...

I am quite interested to see how this story is going to turn out. Please... update... soon!

How do u post stories here?

WWW products weren't forbidden until sixth year, they didn't technically exist, (they weren't being sold) until near the end of fifth, am I unable to tell the year properly, if so I'm sorry, but that does seem wrong.