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that was a great revenge! im just so sorry that Draco dident get any further with his \"techniques\"! excelent!

wow . that story was awsome! i really really wanna know what happens in draco and harrys life after hogwarts! and i really wanna know how pansy and hermione\'s relationship goes and u should \"explain\" their encouters and relationships as well as u do harry and draco\'s. but make more i wanna know what happens after hogwarts. email me if u r going to and if u r email me when u post so i can read!!!!!

ahh! i\'m still only partway through the story, but what\'s driving me nuts at the moment is your use of exclamation points. they\'re everywhere! i finally started tuning them out and the story improved considerably--most people don\'t talk in exclamations all the time, cuz it tends to sound like really bad acting....:D The story is fairly interesting at this point, and there are still a lot of chapters left for good stuff to happen :D

You are in need of a skilled . Y. Your story is entirely too long and it is extremely redundant. You use the wrong words and you skip from one tense to another indescriminately. You use homonyms with no sense of the meaning in the spelling. Your sentence structure is contrived and juvenile. You need someone to sit down and go through your work line by line correcting each sentence.

Please get a SKILLED beta and listen to them. You need someone to totally rewrite your story. You could be a decent story teller if it weren\'t so painful to read.

I sincerely hope that you are in about the 8th grade, because this is written on a middle school level. However if you are as young as your writing skills imply, you have no business at ADULT FanFiction.

i love you story its great. Though there are some grammer mistakes. It is a very god story and i love the way it is written and plannet. it. i know you said that the trial wouldnt be in it because it would be after the greaduation and the story ends there at the graduation. well, I was wondering if you thought about making a sequel to it. If so let me nkow i would love to know and when you get it posted to read it.

hope to hear from yoiu soon.

Peace

Okay, I\'ve only read the first 17 chapters, but I\'ll read the res sos soon as I can. I love it so far! I would just like to point out that your beta missed some really basic grammatical stuff and I think you should let someone else beta this and have them correct the chapters you already have posted. If you like, I would be more than happy to help you out.
It\'s an amazing fic, though, and I was crying during parts of it! I loved it and will review again as I read more! - Saira

This story has been GREAT! I am new to AFF but your story was one of the first I read. You have made me laugh, cry, and get very angry at times as a result your ingenius plot and wonderful chararter development. I hope to hear about everybody\'s lives after HSoWW. Keep up the great work, you and several other authors here add a much needed sub-plot to JKR\'s great works.

Good Luck in future works,
Kevin

For your crimes againist Characterization, and Besmirching the good names of Ronald Weasley and Neville Longbotom this sin aganist fanfiction has been reported to GAFF (Godawful Fanfiction), an Msting site and Ficbitches. In other words: Your ass is toast. This fic will go in the hall of shame where it belongs
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I highly enjoyed it. Now when is nex next chapter comming out?

Hi, I didn\'t know if my last message got to you because my comouter decided to restart before the next page was loaded. Anyways, I really liked your fic it was great. I think you should continue with it, ok actually hoping. I was thinking maybe you could have Justin be okay and find a lover of his own as a twist in the story. I was so sad when I read what happened I really started to cry. I was hoping that you would continue just so Justin could end up okay. Just thinking about it after I was finished with the fic I had to hold back tears. I also wanted to know what would happen to Harry\'s Aunt and Uncle in the trial and if Harry and Draco would stay together which I hope they do. I just thought I would let you know and I hope you use my idea about Justin it w mak make me so happy.
A Fanfic Friend,
Jasmine