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Hello, we wish to have more of the story...its too short..

if uwish to talk to us
myinsane_asylum@hotmail.com

I loved your story. I was a little curious as to Ginny Weasley\'s reaction to Harry being gay...did she agree with Ron, or was she okay with it? I\'m looking forward to finding out what happens after Hogwarts :)

First, I enjoyed your story. I\'d also hazard a guess that English is not your first language from the verb tense and word order errors. That makes your story truly fantastic. I\'d love to know what happens next. Your use of the hexes and deep plot with Harry and Draco says that you have a lot of ideas up your sleeve. I would love to see how the trial of the Dursley\'s goes and how Draco outsmarts his father (I hope). Thanks.

i would love to fix this up it has some grammatical errors that i would like to improve with your permission. I love this story it has alot of character.
amanda

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Hello, I\'m here with a review and an offer. I\'m on my third chapter from a recommendation I got from a friend of mine, who loved your story. I\'m enjoying a lot so far, but as I\'ve copied+pasted onto my computer, I keep having to fix bits - with words kinda melded together
eg: The black haired boy smiled politand and waved back while the first years watched him curiously.

Also, I feel as if there\'s some bits that I can sneak in - words, and anecdotes and basically lots of extra wording to try and improve and lift your story, cos I\'m really enjoying it so far but I think it can much much better, and therefore I would love to be your BETA - checking the grammar, spelling and structure of your chapters, and then adding words if deemed necessary. And if you don\'t like my editing, you can just change it back to how you wanted it! I would love it if you would consider my offer, and I would be ecstatic if you accepted it. Thank you v. much.

Betty Browne (aka Serialangel on Schnoogle.com, and check out my blog - Chronicles of Madness : http://alternate-reality.blogspot.com)

WOW!!!! I really enjoyed your fanfic, Detention can change your life. It is my favorite fanfic of all the ones I have read. You are an exent ent writer and I hope you write more. I look forward to reading more of your work, if you have more. Congratulations on writing such a fantastic story. It was WONDERFUL!!! :)

Savannah

Hmm ... Well, the story line you had going was really well done, in my opinion. And, of course, I love Draco being honest and open and all that goodly stuff. ^^ But, I thought the characters were just ... Too out of character. It would've worked better, perhaps, if you made longer chapters that actually showed the characters developing from their old selves into these new personas ... Things seemed kind of rushed.

Draco had blonde, not silver hair. Silver is grayish, blonde is whitish. And Pansy has black hair. Get it right.

I love it! i absoulutly love it! it is a brilliant and amazingly well written story. i love the way you have written the bonding friendships between the slytherins and gryffindors! its what ive always wanted! Thank you soo much! if you ever wanted to chat with me please email me. i would love to talk! again it is great!!!!!!!!!!