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for De-ageing Draco

by cathankitten

person LadyBlaze25
schedule July 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hi. Great concept, but you should really work on your grammar. Is English your native language? Because if it isn\'t, then maybe you should get a beta to help you translate your work better. But I really like the concept. I don\'t belive I have ever read one like this before. Usually it is a potions accident that makes them younger, and never Draco before. This is gonna be a great fic I believe.

LadyBlaze
person bernadette
schedule May 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh you really need to update this story!!! It\'s great!!!!
Would you please email me if you update? my email address
is Bernadette003@sbcglobal.net
Thanks if you do! =)

~B~
person j
schedule April 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ahhhhhhhh noooooooooo yu are going to finish this story soon!!! or else!!!! lol anyways just fiinish it asap
person Dee
schedule April 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You have horrible spelling and horrible grammar. It would be best if you got a spell check for thory.ory.

Your writing is not very god either. Try to be more detailed, more descriptive.

BNot jusr. \'Lucius walked into the room and saw that Draco was not there. This made him sad.\"

it\'s dull and tiresome.

Get a beta-reader as well. And if you already have on then get another one.

good luck with your story
person Demitria Miriam
schedule April 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Mmm. I like the plot that you have. It\'s ingenious. Your grammar is a little off, but it isn\'t too bad. Lov. Ke. Keep writing. =0)
person sierra
schedule March 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I hate you, i haaaaaaaaate you! how can you stop there?! more, need more! ... please...
person arcee
schedule February 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful story please write more I want to see how you end it .....
person Raija
schedule February 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*takes hes knife and go to say hello to Lockhart*
person Anamaria
schedule February 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
damn...Lockhart got Draco didn\'t he? thatt perv...anywayys update soon.
person Neko Taka
schedule February 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*sits there twitching because of the evil, and waits for more*