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for Look Before You Leap

by LadyFlame

person Jessica
schedule November 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This just keeps getting better and better! I love the whole zipper scene, it reminds me of the movie "There's Something About Mary." It makes me glad I'm a woman, I tell ya. Although I've always wanted to be able to just pull over and pee off the side of the road. Anywho, keep up the excellant work! And for all my frustrations and complaints about it- I do love the sexual tension and cliff hangers!!
person cat
schedule November 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
great:)
person Jolande
schedule November 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Your story really made me laugh, please write more, it has GREAT potential.
person Jeanna
schedule November 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Looks great so far, looking forward to more! :)
person alliekatgal
schedule November 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Nice chapter. Love the description of Draco's eyes. Harry's got it bad!
person Demitria Miriam
schedule November 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You are TOO evil. Really. Stopping there? PAH! More, pwease!
person Blu
schedule November 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Dun dun dun!!!!!
Dont leave me hanging!!!!
continue!

~Blu
person emaleth57
schedule November 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is a very promising start. Well done. Can't wait for chapter 2.
person Pam
schedule November 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Lol!! It sounds great so far! Can't wait for more^_^
person EmeraldGrey
schedule November 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hello!
Ya broke my heart in your review plea. (or plea's for reviews?)
Usualy they are annoying, but your's was too sweet to pass up.
(glares at the other 40 odd + readers who didn't even take the time to offer a review, grrr, hiss...)
I'm a writer too, and, although it's nice to see that you're being 'read' (by the number of hit's you get)
it's even nicer to see that others are:
A) Enjoying hellhell outta what you wrote.
B) At least following the story, and understanding what you are doing in it, with it, etc.
C)Interested enough to give you some sort of feedback, even if it's just a "Hey! Great story! Love the bunnie! Can't wait for Chapter 2! YOU GO Girl! Ya know, stuff like that... =)
D) Sometimes, even a flame can bring about a positive response! It's just in the way ya view it. =)
Now, to your 'review'
I liked your characterization, it was spot on.
I could hear Hagrid's heavy brouge, and lol I could feel Harry's need for 'relief' because you write 'visual' verra well.
Ya got me wondering, hmmm, just what is Malfoy smirking about?
(Both in class, and in the, eh, loo?)
Heh...Be a love and hurry Chapter 2?
Hugs,
Em