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ok, so on chapter 14, you have her wearing a white sundress at the beginning of supper and then she\'s wearing a blouse and black skirt. do you see the problem here? otherwise, you\'ve done a good job.

Hey! So now I\'m back from my long absense, and I thought I would return to a lot of new chapter!

But I understand perfectly well the need to have a break, as I myself have just had one ;o)

It\'s nice of you to let us know, so that we don\'t go thinking that you\'ve abandoned the story.

I\'ll be looking very much forward to when you return!

Love Leonora.

Ch 23 - it\'s okay to step back and take a break from the story, as the break will probably help you have a fresh look at things. Just remember to come back and finish! Thanks for keeping us updated.

I\'d still say that it\'s Lucius (I\'ll be very surprised if it\'s not). That evil man!

I hope he won\'t get to hurt her too badly before Severus (hopefully) shows up to save the day!

For a moment there I thought that she was actually going to escape. That would have been great - if she managed to get away by herself.

Thanks for clearing up to me why Hermione/Ginny were crying.

I wonder if Draco is just as evil as his father in you fic (still assuming that it\'s Lucius of course), it would be awesome if Draco felt sorry for her and maybe helped her escape again.

Anyways - can\'t wait for your next chapter!

Keep up the good work.

Love Leonora.

Ch 22 - ack, \"long blond hair\" - Malfoy??? Ugh! I hope she remembers how she got away last time, and that Severus finds her soon. Thanks for the new chapter.

Oh! The suspense is killing me!

Another amazing chapter, I think you\'re doing such a nice job on this story.

I just have a little note to you about something that striked me as a bit odd in this chapter:

I think that they are overreacting when finding out that Yuki is gone. Especially Hermione and Ginny crying.

It\'s just that she has - after all - not been there for that long, and you have portrayed her as someone who keeps a lot to herself in her room. Even though she has talked a bit with Ginny/Hermione, I\'m not sure if they know her well enough to even call her a friend. And do they know that she might have been held as a prisoner/slave before she showed up? If they don\'t know about this, they might not realize how much danger she is in.

They would of course be worried that she\'s gone, but I don\'t think that they would be this worried (the \"kids\" that is, anyways - maybe the grown ups would be as worried as you describe).

Well - this is just a little note, and something you could consider. I still love your story, you know.

Keep up the great work :o)

Love Leonora.

Ch 21 - ack! whoever took Yuki is NOT a nice person, and anyone helping them is also not a nice person. What was in the folded note she left on her bed at Grimmauld? Thanks for the new chapter - please update again soon!

Oh no! Yuki is in trouble now! And another cliffhanger!!

I still think it\'s Lucius - though, I\'m not sure about the marks on her shoulder. I don\'t know what the S stands for.

Oh - it wouldn\'t be S for slave/servant? Would it? Malfoy\'s Slave/Servant? - I just can\'t stop guessing ;o)

I hope to find out who this guy is soon - though. It was very nice of you to publish again this soon :o)

Love Leonora.

Ch 19 - yikes, Yuki actually walked out of the house!! And Severus won\'t find out until he gets there in the morning? Eeks! Please update again soon. Thanks for the chapter!

Ch 20 - groan .... it\'s not Severus who found her, is it.... Nope, must be a bad guy. Sigh .... NOW how long do we have to wait before you tell us who caught her and how she gets out? I hope Lupin and Dumbledore find Severus ASAP to tell him she is gone! Yikes! Thanks for the chapter, I think. Sigh again.