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Ch 6 - "Shanair was a little unsettled ... would marry a muggle before he married that whore Parkinson" - you mean Shaman; Shaman is the one betrothed to Pansy. Shanair is the one who has Hester. Severus "had been without companionship for almost a year" - but his daughter Sarah is six months old? Severus "didn

Oooh...very good, Miss Weasley!!! Hope you are not receiving too much flack ...I know that you won't answer but I have to ask, if the baby is six months and she has been dead a year...that is off but, they could have been doing without for six months or so...good gosh, you have to continue...BTW, I liked the dicipline chair and the ceremony, and all the other stuff...sigh, the weak at heart! Anyhow...what frustrated you into writting your own fic? It's GREAT!!

Your story is well written and kind of interesting, but she is only 14 (or 16). It does seem kind of perverse to be making her sleep nude in order to form a bond with this wizarding family. I am really glad that the wizarding world in that belongs to JKR is not yours. Its so barbaric....Ginny Weasley does not seem like a beaten little girl neither do the slytherin girls.

This is a really good story. I hope she ends up with Severus...I've always liked a cuddly Snape. :) I'll be watching eagerly for more updates (knowing, of course, that they don't happen daily, but that never kept us readers from hoping for it ) Keep up the great work.

Just letting you know that you need to go back and properly label the WARNINGS for your story. The proper labels would be :
CHAN,NON-CON,D/S,BONDAGE. To let the potential reader know that your story is about an underaged character, in sexual situations without her consent, that it contains bondage and dominance/submission themes. Not to do so is a violation of the readers trust. Many do not like one of the previously mentioned, not to mention all of them. Please be more careful with the way your stories are labeled. It is also not correct to label the story as Hr/SS or Hr/SNAPE as in canon he has NO sons, and they are therefore your original characters. I saw that this is the first story you posted here, so maybe you are new to fandom and are not aware of the way stories need to be labeled. I think here under FAQS you can find what authors need to include in the warnings as per the webmistress.

Absolutly wonderful chapter, terrific, fantastic...excellent...need more, I could break out the Thursouras. I right now am just happy the way it is going. I don't care which Snape she ends up with, I trust your opinion, well, maybe she could end up with the wrong one and the right one come in with both barrels blazing, but that is just the cowboy in me...your fic! it is wonderful, don't get frustrated and update and I will review!!

Ch 5 - glad you've cleared up some of the details. Re Sarah - is that Severus' daughter? It will be interesting to see how he and the boys treat Sarah compared to Hermione; if Hermione truly is a daughter, she should have as many rights as Sarah. As for which Snape she weds - I suppose Severus is the one who can best protect her from his nasty father, although he needs to show her affection and not just discipline. Other than Severus, I'd go for Zaraus (the smiley one who seems nice), then Shanair (Severus' second son who thinks Hermione is lovely); NOT his eldest son (the mind-control freak who seems very nasty). I'm looking forward to reading your next chapter about what Severus says to his boys. Somehow, I don't think this magical chastity belt and "Hermione must do whatever the boys say" will protect her if they force her to submit to anal sex or fellatio. The boys should get to the Discipline Chair as well. Although Severus should know that there is "positive reinforcement" and not just "negative reinforcement" (spanking, whipping). How will you handle the whole Voldemort/Death Eater thing? Severus is still a spy?

I like your story... It's unusual, i's not white and fluffy, it's good written and all these makes the story great. And see HOW MANY DIFFERENT REVIEWS!!!!! I think that means nobody was left indifferent :)
Thank you. Please continue.

Interesting concept. I am enjoying your story so far. I look forward to reading more.

Is it over? do you write back?!?! or what ... I don' understand
maybe my english is too bad or it is to late in the night...how ever