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I see you have relabeled, many will thank you. I defend an author\'s right to write anything they like, but the labels are a must. Then a potential reader can decide before they actually start reading the story if it is their cup of tea or not. The Chan label just means that the story contains scenes with an underage person. This is very offensive to some, and it doesn t matter if you twist and turn it later with the time-turner, it s still chan. Better to avoid unnecessary flames and comments from angry readers by properly labeling. : )

Please continue this story.

I really like the story! What a plot! Dark and ominous and horrible the pureblood world you created. Loads of sexual tension. Great work. I'm curious to see who'll get her (voting for Severus). And what'll happen on the way there.

I strongly suggest you do something about your warnings. ON THE SUMMARY, not at the first chapter or anywhere else. What you are doing is not okay. You better fix that before someone gets really upset and reports you to the webmistress, which could end up with your story being deleted. The proper warnings would be AU, BDSM, B-mod, Humil, Minor (aka Chan or Pedophilia), N/C, OC, Spank.

You also should listen to the ones suggesting you move this story. Shippers can get VERY upset about messing with labels and if you don't plan on making it Hermione/SEVERUS Snape, it is Hermione/OMC and does NOT belong in this category.

I am usually a very friendly person, but I felt "tricked" into reading this. If you had labeled it correctly I would not have. I don't like PEDOPHILIA and I am not in for humiliation or spanking either.

I highly suggest you fix that!

I have to agree with one of the reviers taht said she felt tricked into reading this story. This doesn't appear to be a SS/HGstory. This seems it should be in the OC categories.

SS having a sex month daughter and no sex for a year also doesn't make sense. Not to mention if losing his wife almost destroyed him, he's looking for another bride pretty quickly. Or is HG for all of his sons? Yuck.

This just doesn't "feel" like a HG/SS story and therefore should have not been labelled as such.

Oh yuck. She's contrcated as a "Snape" and all the Snapes can touch her??????? Jeez this not HG/SS. Not to mention it sounds as Snape was "batering" for her with the Grangers while he was still married.

And Snape's father "took" his wife's virginity??? This is just so unnatural.

When the category is HG/SS it means that it's Hermione Granger and SEVERUS Snape. The Severus that's canon in the books. It's not fair to make up your "own" Snape and than say you're leaving it in the HG/SS section becasue she will end up with "a" Snape.

It's immature to do so, it violates the ethics of this site, and it's downright unfair. You can write whatever you want of course, but at least be decent enough to put it in the right category. If Hermione is going to be with or end up with one of Snape's sons this should be in the HG/OMC category. I suspect that since HG/SS is a popular category you want to leave it here-which is fine if it's truly a HG/SS story. And I mean the "real" Snape not your own made up characters.

If you can leave your story in the HG/SS category because you claim that HG is going to end up with an original character of your own named Snape-than let's say everyone can do that. I can make up a cousin of Draco Malfoy also named Draco Malfoy, have Hermione with my made-up Draco and put it in the HG/DM category because it's "a Draco". And anyone else can do the same, if we follow what you're doing-make up a Potter that's an original character have that character with Ginny and label it HP/GW. It's confusing and unfair.

If you intend to have it canon Snape and Hermione by all means it should be in the HG/SS category. But if you mean to have this story HG and one of your original character Snapes. it's not in the right category, it's not playing fair, and it's deliberately deceiving people who come to this section to read stories about canon Snape and canon Hermione.

I hope you are mature enough to understand what I'm saying and what several other reviewers have also pointed out to you about category. To say you're leaving it in this category because you "want to" and because "it's a Snape", is being deceitful and totally immature.

Rachel W. if you're the one who writes the BDSM stories that I have reviewed and loved (and which are SS/HG), if you're the one that's beta'ing this, please explain to her what everyone is trying to say. It's nothing against the story, it's the category it's in. I'm sure you'll agree that if the author intends this to be a HG/Snape's son story, even though the son is a Snape, the story should not be labeled or put in the HG/SS category. It's just not fair. And if you're not "that Rachel W", please excuse me for mistaking you but I still hope you can explain to the author what the HG/SS category means.

I was getting the feeling that the Grangers and Hermione had been somewhat drugged.....I know that my comment must of sent you into a snick, but I am still on the fence about this story. For one....its a very creative idea that I have not ever seen done before...and I have been sailing the Hermione and Severus ship for 3 years. I named him because their are obviously lots and lots of Snapes in this story. I am finding myself still reading this even though I am very very very uncomfortable with your treatment of Women and young Women in particular mainly because you have hit on an idea for a fic that no one has done before. Your writing is very good and you are telling a compelling story. If this story was done without the nudity, discipline chair (which I am glad that he uses that on the boys too....which makes it easier to take) and an almost 50 year old fondling and then beating a 14 year old little girl then this would probably be the story everyone would be recommending to their friends on lists, but then it wouldn't be your story then because I understand that this is what you are envisioning the wizard world being for your story. I respect that....in fact I am still reading your story unlike another story that you keep thanking the author off that is on this site too....that I have stopped reading because of the cruelty and perversity....it was interesting and her writing was great....I was just way too uncomfortable with it and stopped reading it.

I am very interested in Wicca, and have researched it. Yes you are right bloodied sheets were kept especially in the
case of a High Priestess or a Queen in the medieval times, even today a Arab of high ranks servants will take the sullied
sheets and keep them to show his wife was pure on the day of her marriage. However the guardians which you refer too
did not Watch, unless its black magic sacrifice. In a kings place the guardians would check the bed The King and Queen
would be checked and then they would get into the bed, curtains drawn after the deflower a maid of honour (thats where it
comes from) would check the honour of the wife and change the sheets keeping the bedding.

Your story would be and interesting turn on the MLC. but Snape to have a child over 22years of age How old is Snape.
And Hermione is only 14 years of age and has been wrongly touched by several different men and slept with a very old dirty
man, who also punishes his sons, in front of their intended's. It does not work.

Great story so far. I can't wait to see what the marriage will be like.