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O.k. I am intrigued, when do you plan on updating, I wouldn\'t mind an email when you do update, or I can just hunt down your profile, either works, anyway keep up the good work.

Good Chapter and thanks for updating so quickly lately.

Seems a bit rushed as you made a couple of simple mistakes that could
have caught by a reread.

When they are at the table for breakfast and discussing their plans for
the day you clearly indicate Hermione is their and then she
mysteriously went off to visit her parents with Remus. She portkeyed
off without even saying goodbye? Also I thought she was supposed to
remain in close proximity to Harry until she had been checked again by
Poppy. I understand you probably wrote it like that because she would
have disagreed with the strip club but it is a plot inconsistincy.

The other mistake is Harry decided they would take a bus and then
called a taxi.

On other topics isn\'t is about time they return to Hogwarts for
Hermiones chekup?

What is being done about Harry Notice-me Not cloak idea?

Why does Harry have a problem with incest with his aunt but never seems
bothered by The sisters black getting it on?

Harry\'s life seems to be eventful he keeps making plans to do or learn
something and then gets interrupted(like apparation).

What is Tonks punishment going to be(nothing to harsh I hope, i see her
as sort of his favorite because she willingly gave herself to him) and when is
harry going to get it on with Hermione?


Update soon!

*giggles hysterically* that was......funny..........and................HOT!

Um........I think....you should update ASAP......um...........please?

I\'m officially addicted to the story now......so yeah.......that\'s all.

I liked how you had Bella be spanked while Harry watched.

And I thought I was bad...but that actually really good, I can\'t wait to read more, I\'ll be trying to wait patiently for more and no matter what anyone else says....I love your story, period. So if for no one else then keep typing for me please.

Very interesting, and hot. The bit with Petunia was gross, but the rest of it was cool.

More (without H/Petunia, I hope) soon, please.

I like your story so far with Harry and his girls but I can\'t see Harry alowing others to touch them and that is the only thing I hate about your story. Please don\'t let anything happen with bella and dudley and don\'t have Harry give his girls to any one ever PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE

Well, it\'s decent, overall. Could do without Hermione, but whatever. You\'ve got the right idea with Tonks, Bella and Narcissa though, so props on that. I think you need more build-up on the sex scenes though. More detail. It\'s so bland and expected. \"Narcissa took her master\'s member in her mouth. Rubbing her tongue all over the swollen organ she eagerly awaits the impeding load. Harry couldn\'t hold back and shot into her mouth. She shared the spunk with her sister.\" I mean, yeah, that\'s smut and all, but there\'s nothing special about it. I figure, if you\'re going to have every guy\'s fantasy of being woken up by a blowjob by two (or three) beautiful women, at least make it a bit more... eloquent. Put some feeling into the writing.

I liked how you had Hermione tal to Tonks what was bothering her. And how you had Petunia show Harry how grateful she was to him.

LMFAO Nice ending what brought it on any way great chapter i cant wait for the next